All Comments on 'Bachelorette'

Very nice first effort. I hope your final line of "...things were only starting to get interesting." portends a continuation of the story. I'd like to see what else happens to Giselle (does Penny get to enjoy her body, too?) as well as if your protagonist (name?) and Penny get together.

For a first timer you've got a real gift here. Obviously you used some of your time in college paying attention in your English classes. Lookin' forward to more!

great job

When Giselle walked into Penny's backyard, I nearly fell in love at FIST sight. A story about subjugation and domination and out pops fisting as soon as you meet her?

I love it..

(and the writing is good too thank you)

Greg