All Comments on 'Back Alley Rape'

She liked it way too fast. She goes from being raped to wanting him to be her master in 2 seconds. Way too unbelievable even for this site.

Also there was not enough detail about the actual fucking. What did it feel like when his cock violated her? Was it too big and hurt? What did she hear? Smell? See? You can't just say he fucked her until she came.

Stopped reading after the beginning.

force...force....forcefully...forceful

I do not like it when it is written like this.. if you used "I" or "she" it would have been better..

I also agree with the others.. it is going way to fast... there is no time to get into it.. feeling the fear.... know what I mean?

Work on it.. I think you have great potential tho..... ☺

Use first person or third. Second is distracting and crude.

I enjoyed the premise of this story, because I like my stories to be a bit dark, but I will agree with the others - too abrupt how she changes. It would have been best if she didn't.

Also the second person narrative isn't to my liking either - not that its a wrong device to use - that's just my own personal preference.

Keep writing. You are doing well.

I liked the dialogue between the two characters. I agree the transformation was a little fast but that said -- this is just a personal preference -- I really enjoy second person stories. With some more detail this would've been sensational.

But it was just so, rushed.

I actually really like the second person telling. It's like there's someone whispering in my ear, telling me what they're going to do to me. It's really hot.

The actual story itself doesn't flow the best, but the idea is good. Keep writing!!!

Second person is amazing, and also so much harder to find than first and third, therefore making more people attracted to your work due to the rarity of the POV.

Nice!, but IMHO iit should narrate from first person pov, and on past tense maybe.