All Comments on 'Back in the Days of Athens'

noble

Some minor mistakes, but nothing that can't be fixed with an editor. The story itself is still developing so I can't comment on it, but the characterizations are very three dimensional. I am actually interested in how they will develop.

As a writer who still struggles with grammar, but has improved a lot since the beginning, let me tell this: Please don't get discouraged if people say you need to work on grammar. My first stories were in a worse shape than yours , but I learned from the criticisms and praises given by the readers. This is just a start, and later, you'll become a very good writer. People can learn grammar, but things like setting the right mood, character development and grabbing the reader's attention in a subtle way are things that cannot be learned from books; right now, you lack only the grammar part.

So please continue writing. I eagerly look forward to your development as a writer and great stories.

I enjoyed it, and look forward to the second chapter. This is your first story here, and you show promise.

Your story was amazing and I would love to see a second part.

You have created two so appealing and dimensional characters!!! Please give us many more chapters. Would see their relationship developing into a mutually supportive and loving (?) partnership as he takes the reins of the family and its enterprises.

I have enough problems from people who don't have your troubles. " English isn't my first language and I do have dyslexia "

Please do write a second. I would definitely read it.

I hope you come back to this tale. I love historical fiction and this one has the seeds of a good series. I recommend reading the Hellenic Traders series by H N Turteltaub for some ideas and background on Ancient Greek.

Cmon man, that was good but continue the story.

Very good tale. But you can't leave us waiting?????? Tell us what happens next.