All Comments on 'Back to 1956 Ch. 01'

??? Where's the story? That wasn't enough to bring me back to read any more chapters that come out.

It was well written, even if there was no content.

Too short of a chapter to make anything of it.

Unlike others I am coming back to see how the story will progress. I think what you were trying to do is give us a little teaser here with the opening part of the story. So I am putting you in my favorites to read how this story play out. Good luck.

Get one. Immediately. Mediocre writing, at best.

... time travel is not erotic.

I see others have made the same comment, but to be fair to you, I'm guessing that the car accident is probably the moment of transition from 2018 to the 1950s, right? So stopping at this point is a natural chapter division. Perhaps you should have called it 'The Prologue' rather than 'Chapter 1'? Having said that, I think the concept of an interracial couple being translated to 50s Alabama is an inspired one - 10/10 for the idea! On a grammatical note, please remember that 'your' is the possessive pronoun, as in 'your mother is here'. What you needed in your text was "you're" which is the contraction for 'you are' as in 'I think you're being selfish Evelyn' Another nitpick comment is that it is usually considered 'bad form' to begin a sentence with 'but', unless it is dialogue, when it can be allowed, as people often say things like; "But I was only kidding!" To use it in your narrative is weak because 'but' should be a conjunction linking two ideas together. 'However' is better to start a sentence with. I hope you don't mind me pointing these things out - I think your story has great promise and I want to thank you for writing it. Why 2018 and not 2011? Just wondering. Anyway, please keep going and don't be put off by unhelpful negative comments. Good luck!

I agree with Darkeagle_UK! I think this story has great potential! I wish it was longer and a little editing couldn't hurt. Please don't be discouraged by unhelpful negative comments. I'm excited to see where this story goes!

An interesting premise for a story. I will say you should find an editor for some small fixed and trivial things, but other than that it was really good. Keep at it.

start can't wait to see where this goes, I will be checking for updates im sure

Another writer did a similar i/r time travel storyline not long ago. 14 chapters and then apparently abandoned. It was a really great series that I enjoyed reading and disappointing that the author stopped writing it.

I have added this one to my favorites to follow it along. It's an interesting topic and I hope you are able to develop the story with practice. I echo others on the short chapter. Then again, I did that too on my first story chapter LOL.

Good luck with this and I'll look forward to more and better!

gates are open and the field is ready to be taken...

This is why people should talk about these things BEFORE they get married. Instead they think talk about money, children and long term goals aren't romantic. Arguing all the time isn't romantic either. Onward!

Great start interesting story.