by ikhneumon
That last sentence is beautiful. The desire, the setting, the imagery of fire and heat and things to come, is about as romantic as a cliffhanger can get. Nice!
Jeff sounded "immensely pleased with himself," not "myself." What I get for submitting two chapters at once all in a rush at 1 a.m. Head, meet desk.
I love this story. I cant wait to see the next chapter. really well writen. keep up the good work.
This is such a great story: older, famous actor finding love again with an innocent young man. Please keep writing quickly.
in a lot of stories once the first 'amazing- groundbreaking- first of its kind' sex scene is over, things go into a limbo.. Probably bcoz one looses the anticipation for something to happen.. U however, managed to keep the love flowing.. At the same time, u left the us with the uncertainity that all the unanswered questions bring into a new love... we'll all b cmin back for more now..so, don't keep us in suspense for too long..
the romance makes the sexual tension so much hotter. it's great to get both flustered perspectives - vulnerable, worshipping daniel and sexy, adoring jeff. i also get a kick out of kelly's humor. can't wait for the next installment!
' I could see a very tempting bulge in his pants, and briefly considered going down on him right there in the car. Remembering the death-defying ride to his house the previous night, though, I squashed the urge firmly. No need to tempt fate twice in less than twenty-four hours.'
Daniel thinks in the funniest ways, his thoughts just crack me up , his just like my boyfriend shy and innocent in bed but feisty in the bedroom lol!! i love your story off to read chp 5
Romantic, tantalising, fun, fulfilling our hopes for the love development between two very sweet guys. What more could we want - oh yes, a short but hot shower scene, yum.