All Comments on 'Ballbusting the Panty Thief'

you to be cruel just because you found a flimsy excuse to be so.

I see this was your first story. Let's hope it's your last. Totally pointless and stupid. The WORST story I've ever read on here by a mile.

Try and be fair to the guy (or girl?). If as anonymous pointed out this was the first story they have written, instead of saying "you suck, never write another story again" or something similar, it would have been better if you gave some pointers as to how to improve. All writers start out being mediocre.

Anyway, as for the story although it was short, and will probably appeal only to a select few, the story was well told and well structured. A good effort, and better than many first stories I have.

Just try to keep in mind, when reading the comments, that the story may even repulse some people. I know felt that same weird sensation in my balls as I do whenever I see a guy receive a blow the crotch on TV. :)

-FantomRedux

I didn't particularly care for your story, in part due to subject matter (although there are those on Literotica who will love it), but primarily because it's much more of a vignette than a story, there's practically no character development, and the conclusion essentially resolves nothing. That said, you spell correctly and use both paragraphing and grammar well, which puts you head and shoulders above a great many other writers on this site. Keep writing, but give yourself more length to play with and to develop both a story line and your characters.

I can tell this was a first draft. you didn't do any character development or story development. The only thing you have going for you is that you were good with your spelling and actually used paragraphs. As for the content of the story, get real, nobody is that cruel so no way is this story even remotely believable. Two thumbs way down

I may not have liked the story- but I remember my own first stories were crude.

Erotica is like many other things- it takes practice and time. Learn to develop your craft. Then try again

I think it's a great story! This topic needs more attention and you hit the nail right on the head. Also, it was written just fine. Don't listen to critics who are obviously jealous.

is this a true story or something?! the story is sort of effective!.. Keep it up

Each one of them should have made him lick their assholes clean. Describing the smell and taste of each one.

I gave it a 5 but I would have liked it even more if u described how he begged them to stop while crying n they didnt8D love it anyways

Please do that to me you sexy bitches

I'd have sniffed them for concession like that lol

That sounds so hot I would love to have the hole varsity cheerleading squad bust one or both of my testicles🍆🍆🍆🍆🍆😍😍😍

Personally, as a different anonymous person on the internet, I found the story lovely. Its brevity makes it effective. So many authors on this site want to craft their next opus, and sometimes I just want to read something where the action moves quickly and I'm there. This story did that for me, thank you