All Comments on 'Banker's First Encounter'

I like the plot laid out, but you rush too quickly through the details and the story falls flat. Add some details and draw out the sex for greater satisfaction for all.

I like the way it was laid out, but like previous comment, you moved too quickly through the story. Maybe some dialogue and a few details could stretch it out a bit and make for a better read. I enjoy a short tale now and then but this was a little too short for my taste. Not badly written. I have a feeling you could do even better.