by davion2308
Liked this very much and would love to read more. The premise of this story is quite interesting and offers lots of possibilities for further chapters :-)
I'd like to see you continue this story, have her open up to him, give her some kind of story, a little romance wouldn't hurt, and be more descriptive with everything. I'd like to see this turn into a story that I can re-read and not get bored of it.