All Comments on 'Be Reasonable. Do It My Way Ch. 13'

I've read most of what Olddirtyman has posted, and I've enjoyed the stories a good deal! I read these to jerk off though, and only the plot carried this story for the second half. Seems like this could have been a really sexy noir (if more realistic characters and more careful plot) or some creep's wet dream (if the protagonist had been relatable) but it kinda fell halfway between both.

If every girl has huge tits, then tits are less special. Big tits should be special. Maybe include some flat-chested girl or a black chick or something, just for variety.

Language gets overused in sex scenes too. Everything is "bone crushing" and "earth shattering" and the "best ever". Sometimes sex is great, sometimes it's OK.

Maybe consider developing the lead less? Or make him more relatable? 10.5" dick, smooth tongue, tons of money, power, and a busty harem of secretaries...great for a fantasy story, but doesn't fit a noir. I'd rather read about Ed!

I'll check back for more stories!

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Like another poster, I read these stories for stimulation. But every now and then, I get the bonus of a really good writer telling an excellent story. ODM, you write really well, and the sex bits are pretty good too!

This is the first series on this site I've read from start to finsih. It's fun, has a plot (sort of) and big titted women who want to fuck as often as possible. What's not to like!

A proofreader would have been a great investment. Why does every man need to have a nine inch dick, & why disparage a six inch tool? Don’t authors know the average cock length in the U. S. is 5 ¼ inches?

6 inches is enough to be proud of.

The plot wound around too many happenings at times & Harry’s partner seemed like an afterthought.

O really I think it was a 4 star effort & an enjoyable read.

Bill S.

The prior commenters have some good constructive criticisms and make some very good suggestions. Having said that, I really enjoyed the story, and the sex. While all the huge tit women was over the top, it did make for a very nice fantasy. Overall, I thought it was an outstanding story, if barely plausible.