All Comments on 'Beach House Shower for Two'

The story wasn't bad. I'd go as far as a 3-4. The writing was weak though.

Keep trying.

nice, hot story. I liked this story, and I liked your writing. I really like when authors let the reader know what the character is thinking/feeling, and you did that verrrry well. The sex was pretty accurate for the ages of the characters. I was hoping Jackie's second round would go a bit longer. Meh, no big deal.

I loved the note that came with the care package!

Oh, and I hope you do realize that you've created some expectation for that return visit. And please make Jackie come prepared (the condom should help the sex last longer)

By the way, please disregard Anonymous commenters who complain without any specifics.

and the result was most enjoyable. 5***** of course

I gave it 4* only because it ended too fast

If there's another chapter have more Xdressing teasing in it!!!!!!