by Maxrodstaff
"My body was feeling like I had stuck a fork inside of an electrical socket. This was heaven."
Not sure if sticking anything in an electrical socket would feel like heaven, to be honest. You might end up there but...
Story came to a very abrupt ending without any conclusive action - well, without much action at all really.
Ankles behind her head? Interesting. Very bland story. Sex with his sister's? Guess I missed reading that part when I FELL ASLEEP FROM BOREDOM!!!!!
Stargazer55
You are not supposed to be writing stuff like this until after elementary school and probably not until after high school when you know how it all happens. Come back in a few years.
I enjoyed your story, but I would have liked it more if you had spent more time letting the older sister seduce her younger brother. She should have teased him more and she could have made him work for her pussy. They could've had hot hotter sex if it was drug out to the point where both were begging for sexual release.
...... unfortunately the rest was rubbish. As someone else said, if you're a mid teen try again in a few years time. Otherwise, don't bother.
I can see where this could turn into the entire family getting in on the fun. Hope there are more chapters coming about this family vacation.
If they had the option for a NEGATIVE, you would of had it!!
Stick to writing out your moms shopping list!