All Comments on 'Beach Volleyball Fun'

your- belonging to you

you're- contraction.. meaning you are

there- place.. put that sack over there.

their- belonging to someone.

they're- contraction.. they are

to- action... I went to the store.

too- also... I want to come too.

two- number following one

I liked it, but some basic editing required. The shower scene was pretty hot.

nice story, the way it unfolded outweighed the minor mistakes....thank you

Thanks for the comments so far, was my first try at a story. I will try to keep improving, and to make sure I take the time to comb over every mistake in the future.

It is a little scary, isn't it? I posted my first story a week ago and I've not been able to sleep sense. For me? I loved your story! Keep at it! Kisses.

I think you did a great job. Definitely held my attention. Hope there's sequel to follow! <3 Christy

Please continue this story. Don't leave us hanging. We want more.

This was short but really good. The physical description of the characters was good. The build up was also good.

Good being the key word.