All Comments on 'Beauty and the Geek Ch. 01'

But it seems to be missing something. The writing is a little choppy and abrupt, which sometimes makes me think I'm missing part of the story. Or maybe I'd just like to see more of the developing romance before it jumps right into marriage. I think this story could work better with a slower pace, but that's just my opinion. Do keep writing, I'm keen to find out what happens next.

well yes perhaps, but certainly not a Literotica romance--this belongs in the non-erotic category. They get along great as friends but I see no sexual spark, not even a smoldering kiss. The writing and grammar are ok, but the story-line needs work. I agree with the other comment that the story seems to shift abruptly without resolving things. For example, his boss, her father, is left out of this altogether. How could that be? I really have no idea what the main character looks like...

Great story line, but that chapter ending was hideously abrupt. Please ch02 soon.

With a hook like that they would be a shoe in for funding

Im confused the time frame seems to not only use a lot of very old terms like lame ducks and makes me think of a time like early 1900s or before but it talks of cds and a few other things that were after 1980s