by perfectupper90
The change in tense and the numerous grammatical erros makes it hard for the story to flow. Also, presenting Kyle as a straight man who never thought about sex with a guy comes off as phony when he jumps right into sucking cock. There should have been more reluctance on Kyle's part and more persuasion on his partner's end. Story was very mundane as presented. The title misleads as the author doesn't show very well that the two men are friends. Easily forgetable story.
i loved it make another chapter please please
I thought it was brilliant , how I envy Kyle and wish it could have been me .