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His voice was so deadly, Joey withered. "Yes, sir."
"Sit down with me. You'll just be in the way."
The rest of unpacking and setting up went uneventfully. Joey watched a high-tech looking array of computers and communications devices being set up in the lobby at an alarming rate.
Michael took control as soon as it was done. He plopped down in the middle of the humming, electric mess and glanced over everything critically. Finally, he nodded. "Ready, sir."
"Good." Donovan stood up. "Men, get ready. I want everybody armed in ten minutes. Michael's got the comm, here. Michael, when we reach his land, you'll guide us in. We don't want to be slowed down looking at maps, if we have to change direction. You will have all entrances and exits covered. Kevin has them already laid out."
"Yes, sir." Michael was already busily typing away on his computer. "I can get a 3D simulation up and running by the time you get there, so I can track you. Too bad, I won't be able to see any obstacles, without cameras in there, but if any come up, I can get you in and out in a flash."
Donovan slowly stalked to a table loaded with weapons and selected one of the special guns. He slid a cartridge into it with a snap. "Let's go get my wife."
*French Translations*
Bon soir = Good evening.
Mon cher/chèri = My dear/darling
Au contraire = On the contrary
Comportez-vous = Behave yourself
Rapidement! = Quickly!
Fini = finished
- COMMENTS
stealthwaspalmost 4 years agoJust because people are surprised doesn't mean this came out of nowhere. All of this makes sense in the context of the story. Even the shift in tone was done appropriately. It's a tough read so I understand why some people might not like it. But it's more unrealistic for a woman to get kidnapped and nothing happens to her.
Anonymousalmost 7 years agoI swear i loved ur story until this fucking chapter.....it WAS GREAT.....UNTIL u RUINED it.....PREGGO RAPE seriously....might as well throw in a gangbang rape lactation shit for fun.....RUINED IT FOR ME
A SERIOUSLY HEARTBROKEN FAN
Anonymousover 9 years agoI dont understand why you felt the need to add this whole rape thing to the mix
Your story was already sort of out there with the whole she was gambled away, he was obsessed with her, etc. But it was still slightly slightly slightly believable. Now not only is it totally Crazy but it churns my stomach and ruins the whole story. I wish i could take back every star i gave this story.
Anonymousalmost 10 years agoI really like the story before the rape scenes :/ i mean cant you judt write a romance story minus the rape incident honestly i was feeling sorry for donovan i believe that a wife's virginity is the greatest gift she could ever give to her husband i wanted donovan to receive that honor to feel that even though he believes that he is a ghastly beast someone so pure and innocent wanted him. Rape scenes are just psychotic theyre totally wrong imagining or hearing them is just too much and you dont need those to spice up or put conflict in the story it might be just fiction but wont you be disgusted with yourself thinking how you enjoyed the fact of writing a rape incident about a girl? Not only that to top it off you made a repeat of it once was enough knowing she was pregnamt with the encounter was worse but having to undergo the same thing again is just sick :/ i hope you change your plotline tjis was the first time ive commented a story before and a bad comment at that :/
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoWhen I first started reading this story I was very interested, but now I feel like this is the dumbest story I've ever wasted time reading. Really? I feel as though you are just making stuff up as you go along with out any clear direction or intent. You really need to work on this. And the people that actually like this story after reading this chapter must be like 12 or something. You also need to really sit down and think about more realistic reactions and scenarios because your characters sound like they belong in a cheap low budget soap opera. Sorry to be so harsh but I refuse to keep reading. I am very disappointed. You started off with great potential, then crashed and burned.
Anonymousabout 11 years agoI'm not sure if this story is in the right category - 'Romance' has left the building long ago! If there was an 'Absurd' category I'd suggest that one. It's strange that with so much time between postings, this story hasn't been better thought out.
spearishabout 11 years agoWay to go !! Its actually plausible !! Although gruesome and I still think old Donovans a bit psycho to say the least .By now I should think the only ending would be our poor Scarlett ending up in a mental institution at the very least after all the things that have been done to her :-(
shortydeeabout 11 years agoThis is a great story, I hope that you will be updating it real soon. I love the best friend.
Keep up the great work!!
Chaser56over 11 years agoMate, You really need to finish this story or at least submit another chapter sometime soon. You got a pretty good cliff-hanger going here and it's almost agony not knowing where or what you'll do next in the story. You do have a good story going here and it would truly be a shame not to finish it and leave your readers hanging. If nothing else, can you at least give us readers an estimate as to when you might have the next chapter ready for submission - it might stop a few of us from giving up waiting.
