All Comments on 'Becoming Her Sister Ch. 03'

Find someone who writes idiomatic English to help with terminology and descriptions.

It feels as if there is a chapter missing between 2 and 3 - he is suddenly raping the main character out of no where

Your story is good, but you have a lot of typos. You should have someone proof read your stories & edit them before you post them. It will make them better & much easier to read. :)