All Comments on 'Behind the Toy Store'

I really enjoyed how you spent so long creating this appealing character, making her interesting, hinting at depths that could be further revealed. I like that you're able to keep me interested without giving it all away on the first page, instead you keep the tension rising. But then in the last half-page it all kind of fell apart. I expected that now she finally had him there she'd take her time, maybe indulge in some exhibitionism for a few days while he worked, but instead she just launches herself at him which seems uncharacteristic to me.

I love your style and I'll definitely read more of your stories, I just felt that the end of this one was quite rushed and suffered as a result.

Long "lead in" but worth the wait. Should have been Chapter Two. well written

I encourage you to continue this story, from in front of the windows to ?