All Comments on 'Beijing Chicken...'

Im disappointed for various reasons about this story

Firstly you as the writer have made a very serious attempt at injecting a very original thought provoking concept in this tale....but have failed miserably to connect the parts and show relevance to the whole story

By infatuation in the mistresses female assistant you created the possibility of some form of sexual happening.....only to leave the reader with nothing

Then the silliness with reference to KFC and Peking duck and the especially inflated Chinese belief of the superior cuisine and eating preferences.....that was sublimely unnecessary to the story.

And lastly.....the minute amount of time spent in the actual description of the coitus between gigolo and client detracts totally from the said theme of the story.Also you initially describe his almost disgust at the clients shape,appearance and mannerism....and then proceed later to do exactly the same with the original point of his desire....the assistant......which leads me to wonder if you became confused while writing the story about what effects the other two characters would have on the gigolo.....or do you just have an aborence for tea house personel?

All in all....disappointing....as there are grammatical errors aplenty in the story as well.

You would be well advised to in future set out your plot more carefully....check for inconsistencies and also have a moderator/ co-writer check your American English to make it more acceptable to other Western English readers.

I was hooked, reeled in and ready for more, please be encouraged to write more, this is my favorite of anything I have read here or anywhere else, with a lot of anticipation about the assistant that I hope to fulfill from your future writing

Unique again.

Thanks for that.

It needs an ending...it just trails off.