All Comments on 'Bela'

...For so many reasons. I've written and read many pieces that describe beauty, but its always the beauty we grasp through understanding that makes the greatest impression. Bela was truly described beautifully within your story, and adorned at various stages from the reader's perspective. Not an easy task for a writer to accomplish, but done nicely here. For all the wonder and beauty... it needed more. I needed, so badly, to understand more about Bela. Our unnamed male in the main role was well represented, being written in first-person, but Bela needed to be described in so much more detail. The acceptance and the process by which that eventually HAD to become the all consuming issue between them was almost glossed over and it screamed for more... as did the ending. I gave it 5 stars because it had an amazing vision to it. But it needed that sweeping vision to come back into some better defined scope of how these two interacted away from the bed. Still... wow... just a great bit of writing, and thank you for sharing it with us. Cheers! --- Josie

Why serbians at university in Norway? Wrong your. Cubbard?!? Get someone to proof read it

Literary is the operative word for this piece. I rarely see a work of this magnitude available to the readers of this site. Well crafted with a beautiful attention to detail. I agree with Joscelyn2tg but I would argue that you've crafted a subtle description of Bela that lingers in the mind beyond the simple assembly of words to stir our imagination. She is fragile and delicate, gossamer like breath that fades too quickly on a frosty Norwegian morning. Your story was the same for me, delicate and rich leaving me wanting more. Well done.

Amazing descriptions without being too wordy. Nice panoramic picture you painted. Looking forward to more.

I really liked the story; please continue with additional chapters.

Your =/= you're. Edit your shit.

Liked it a lot... so sweet but hot also... please write more.. I think it word be so nice to be able to appreciate everyone as a unique individual...

Beautiful. I envy her. Xxxxxx

Tiffany.

A beautiful & erotic story. Well done!

Really enjoyed thank you ;-)