All Comments on 'Belated Proposal'

Corny Fantasy, but fun

Since English appears to be a second language, I suggest you find an editor.

From your bio- "Retired university professor who discovered erotica after retirement. Published in professional journals and presented papers at professional meetings. Have published ten erotic stories over the past three years. Grammar and punctuation skills lacking due to having editors during university career"

Maybe you should have paid more attention when you were being educated, did you even read the edited versions of what you wrote? Clearly you learned nothing from that either, take the time to find an editor before you submit here, I'm sure one of the many editors on here would be able to help in some way. Or here's an idea, learn about grammar and punctuation.

What an unbelievably bad story. The story changes perspectives constantly, littered with spelling errors. Just a nightmare to read.

Get an editor or just stop writing all together.

I don't believe my anonymous commentators will read this, but I thought a reply was appropriate. I don't mind my stories being trashed, but commentators should know that internal dialogue is written in first person present tense, and incomplete sentences in dialogue is more the rule than the exception. Literotica does not use italics to denote internal dialogue thus it is easy to miss what is internal and external.

Then fuckin' compensate for it, and use 'italics', and deal with it.

[pfhpppppbt]

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came much too quickly. C