All Comments on 'Best Friends Forever Ch. 02'

Just read this all the way through from the first chapter. I live the story and how much they love each other. Please keep going as it seems like this story will just keep getting better and better :)

You have conveyed the autobiographical nature of the story very well. Everything that happens seems realistic, and stays quite close to the main character's imagined fond memory. Definitely keep it up!

It was a great read and had a ring of truth to it. More is not necessarily better, but I think it would be in this case.

I see that it has been a fairly long time since you submitted this story. I hope you didn't become discouraged. I think you have a great writing style and hope you will consider doing more. Thanks for your story.

.As 'oldwayne' said has a ring of truth and to be honest it is very close to my 'FIRST TIME'. Please continue the story... biggest question tho did you marry her?

Great story please add chapters and did they marry.

Other comments have said why it's good better than I can.

I notice you don't seem to have an editor, yet I found less mistakes than some edited stories. The most mistakes I noticed were in the first couple of really steamy paragraphs in chapter two. For future chapters/stories it might help to focus more self-editing on the steamy sections - you're writing it so well I think you may be distracting yourself.

NOTE: The mistakes weren't enough to degrade the story, just to get my attention - I have been called "the proofreader from hell" (although I try not to be too anal retentive :-).

This is everything I have ever wanted.

Still a good premise.

Sex still too rushed.

For example, she's got dirty magazines. She wants him to explain what the couples are doing. But they don't even look at them. What an opportunity -- missed -- for the both to get turned on looking at the pictures, talking about the activities in the pictures, and get turned on by the thought/s of doing those things to eash other.

Four stars.