All Comments on 'Betrayal 02'

That was way to short now I have to wait for ages for more, that is so cruel! Please,please hurry and post the rest asap!!!!

it doesnt seem as if the premise has changed... I hope the gap between chapters isnt too long in that case (since you didnt submit them all at once)

wait for ages, since when is 3 days ages? Good job look forward to the next chapter :)

One day is to long! LOL I loved this story first time round and patience is not my virtue!

Just reading the revamped version of this story again, now.

And it's still a really great read the second time through.

Anyway, just to let you know, still a glitch in this chapter, falling into first-person view once:

"He picked up the data pad that hung from the foot of my bed and started going over my charts."