All Comments on 'Betrothed Ch. 02'

Your driving me nuts!&@$% Too short! Too short! Too short!

I'm dying to know what happens next...This story has captivated me...But PLEASE!!!! Hopefully the next chapter will be longer :)

It's got kidnapping, lost love, a ship! I'm thrilled! Please don't keep us all waiting*

This is a great romantic story. I'm looking forward to more chapters. Keep it up!

.....and an adventure at sea! What more could anyone want in a good love story! Looking forward to more! :)

I'm beginning to warm up to this chapter and story. Funny, the first chapter didn't seem to hold my interest but this one does. Then I went back to re-read the first one and find it more acceptable. But I wasn't really into Snakeboy though I like the concept of the story that was the princess managed to look past his green scaly skin. I suppose because you started it with 'A long time ago there was a king and queen' which, made the story sounded like it was a children's fairy tale instead for mature audience. Anyway both this Bethroted was a little too short and I think you should build more character for both your hero and heroine. At least your heroine was more emphasized than your Nick. He seemed to be too plain. Oh well, good luck to your writing though.

I agree the ch. is to short. Very "Princess Bride"ish if you've seen the movie. Good story line though!

The single page format still troubles me greatly. I'm glad that I'm not reading this 15 years ago because I would have been cursing up a storm. I'm okay with serial stories as long as the installments take longer than 60 seconds to read. So far, this entire story could have easily been a 5. But this installment gets nothing but a 4 strictly because of the format and no other reason. 4/5