All Comments on 'Beware Mr. Green'

The sex reads like an indiscriminate collage of low grade porn films. Too over-the-top for me, unless you classify this story as "satire". But then, some people must get off on it.

At least the basic writing skills are there ..

The lack of syntax, punctuation and basic writing skills won't get you a passing grade in high school, let alone the derivative sex scenes that parody the actual act. Please run a spell and grammar check next time. There WAS a basic plot that COULD have been develped. I'm still waiting for the ending.

Several times you used the phrase "would of" when it's correct to say "would have." Hard for me to get past sloppy writing.

But keep trying.

stupid says it all!

Loved how dirty it was. Hot stuff. Thanks.

Make her pregnant and please continue.....it would be fun....make her Green's personal slut. Please write ch 2

For the love of all that is sloppy, dirty, and unholy please make a chapter 2!!! This was by far the greatest story ive read on this site and i just need to have it continue!