All Comments on 'Big Brother No More'

Storyline has potential but the numerous grammar errors make it difficult to read. Please get an editor ASAP.

Sure, some editing might help, bvut the sincerity

in the story was terrific.

Please keep writing.

Entertaining story. Thanks for sharing it.

I really hope you continue to write more stories like this one and maybe even continue this story.

<p>I too hope that you continue to write. However, you desperately need to proofread your work before submitting it for publication. The number of typos was very distracting and should have been easily caught.</p>

<p>While I liked the story, that plot device of having the assailants pay huge awards and thus fund the marriage of these lovebirds was fanciful at best. Actually I thought you could have left the ending simple and mentioned those others only in passing. I also had difficulty with the randy nurse who was obviously a throw-away character. That subplot could have been eliminated without harming the basic storyline.</p>

<p>Even so, this story was a fair effort.</p>

That was great too bad there was no voting because it's a 555555555555

There was no rate thus story section. I give it 5 stars.

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