All Comments on 'Big Time Revenge'

This doesn't even deserve a comment.

get fucking real

one "writer" I'll never waste my time reading again

1* for advanced stupidity

Where's the revenge??? 1* for being dreary and boring.

And twins no less . That's as far as I got . Awful

0

A whole new low for LW, what utter garbage, 14 inch cocks, what utter fucking rubbish! When the fuck is lit going to allow MINUS scores???

1*

Fiction, while divorced from reality, are supposed to be grounded in some form of reality. They're supposed to be entertaining. They're supposed to have some form of drama and tension.

This story has none of these things. I kept reading in the hope of some glimmer of resolution or vindication.

Nope. None.

Another daily baboon

Please, author. Go get a frontal lobotomy, drink arsenic, shoot yourself but please, please STOP WRITING THESE HORRIBLE STORIES.

A new low. Couldn't even begin to finish whatever this is.

Dear oh dear, whatever possessed the author - and I use the word advisedly - to write this farcical and impossible pile of crap !

Revenge? Revenge on whom? I only see on herself! A woman that goes so low, can't love or respect herself. She even doesn't love, care and respect her child, exposing her to this kind of relationship! Maybe in a few years they will be fucking the daughter too with her approval! Then only "fourteen inch" cocks? To make it different why not 18"? This is so bad that as someone said: this is "A new low" in LW! 1* (where are the negative ratings when we need them?)

A new low for this site.No vote .It would denigrate the one.

before I read this garbage.

lest one forget what started this fiasco. TK U MLJ LV NV

absurd cuck shit.

stupid. I am really curious as to your reasoning for making the cocks fourteen inches. I mean, why? It took me right out of the story. If that's your own personal fantasy fine, whatever, but it probably won't work as entertainment for too many other folks.

Also, the wife committed the greater wrong by allowing Bevis and Butthead access to their child. Terrible parenting bordering on abuse.

10 minutes of my life I'll never get back

What, exactly, was the point?

Read the highest rated stories here and in a couple of other categories and then craft a story with at least a bit of thought put into it.

If you are going to do something you might as well put a decent amount of effort into it otherwise there really is no point.

Is this a joke?

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At least I think there was a good story in your head. It just did not make it to the page.

A wasted 3 minuet read. Whore wife fucking , femdom trash. # 1

Fourteen inch cocks? Don't make me laugh. Beyond stupid. And she can't prevent him from coming home. It's his home and unless she has a Court order he can move back in at any time. Of she can divorce him, but that takes time. He's going to divorce her after seeing the giant cocks rip her apart. He knows that he'll never be able to feel the walls of her cheap cunt and that sex with her will be a non event going forward. She doesn't want him back anyway. She just wants to punish him. If he was smart, he'll struggle and get rope burns. After being released he'll call the cops and claim he was forced. At least he'll get a bigger piece of their assets while she's in jail. And at the end? She never had any brains to fuck out. Idiotic story not worth the time spent to read it.

No stars.

Why would want to come home to that?

Why would she want doubled 14" dicks. Her posterior fornix would be bruised and torn. Hardly the recipe for sexual ecstasy.

Why would you write his tripe?

Why did I read this? 5 minutes I can never reclaim.

Please, don't write chapter 2. Or anything else. Please.

Even a fantasy must have some connection to real life and real people for readers to imagine themselves in the story to enjoy it.

Unquestionably the worst story I've ever read on lit, and that is saying a lot

So far fetched was not very good

Take a hint.

BTW I agree with the unanimity.

But thanks for the effort.

Your first story. Make it your last as well. Total crap. I gave up reading it

who cares?

Oh my! What was this? All I can say is that it is so bad that I can't stop laughing.

Seems like it - the plot line is pathetic at best and reeks of those mentally challenged simple cell amoebas. Puke!

It has no twists, no objective and is completely unbelievable.

I've never seen so many wasted electrons. 1*

It's true. It is. It's great. It's beautiful. It is. It's true. It is.

And the Mexicans will love it. They will. It's true.

the story gets an automatic 1.

Oh, well. It was fun to write.

I understand why this got such horrible reviews. Think of this as being all the crazy action scenes in a movie being worked out in advance.

I plan to slow this down and develop a back story that will make everything work out.

Frankly, I have a theory why porn is so insanely addictive and I plan to write something that will make ultimate sense of it all.

This story is a shorthand version of phone sex that my wife and I have had in the past. It didn't occur to me that others would not understand that the setup was already in place.

She already knows the setup but you, dear reader, do not.

It is now my job to bring this to you in its entire context.

It will be a while, I have a lot of work to do.

And you will see it it in a form that you will never expect.

I just hope that Literotica will publish it in its entirety...

If Shelly married the two clocks what happened to the daughter, Tim should have full custody considering Shelly is shacked up with the twin clocks. Only a 2** huge hole in finishing story.

pretty fucken stupid i must say.

I would've been heartbroken if I had received a few good comments among many negative ones but, no, they're all negative.

In the days of Instant Web Hatred movements, I am inclined to think that having no positive reviews means that at least a FEW people sort of lived it.

Zipp.

the thing you have to remember is most of the readers in this category are Damaged goods .. alot of them either have shit relationships or are divorced because they are crappy partners.

so the one paragraph you spent explaining What a useless, cheating, worthless, waste of space Tim is/was .Never even registered in the two brain cells most of the trolls here call a a brain .

for them no matter what the Husband does ...

it is ALWAYS the wifes fault and always will be

good narrative , excellent dialogue

intruigingly Nasty plot.

site could do with a few more Burn The Bastard stories of this quality

(worth 4 stars ,, voted 5 just to improve the price on my big pharma shares)

X Michelle

I can't think of a worst story I have read in over 4 years.

find a worst story. yet he keeps coming back to LW to read them all. he's fucking insane and a fag cock sucking ugly old man. DIE you asshole

Vote 1* for 𝐓𝐇𝐄 𝐅𝐀𝐓 𝐃𝐔𝐌𝐁 𝐓𝐑𝐀𝐍𝐍𝐘 𝐖𝐇𝐎𝐑𝐄™ (that's what her clients call her) aka BONNIE/VASTIE aka NEEDYOU200 aka 5+ANNONY!

To be honest, this is a poorly constructed story with little or no significant build up to the action in the story. This deserved a much larger setup to the action. The problem is that the story was developed in the shorthand that my wife and I developed during our phone sex time. We are able to cut to the chase because we are already aware of the back story and this is something I kind of blew off.

My goal was to get to the point and then get out, or get off, or whatever.

I appreciate your support but I also understand the criticism. This story has way too much that moves way too fast and is way too crazy.

It is unbelievable at best...

Like the comment left by Zipparoo underneath mine - it pretty sums up why this story ultimately doesn't work.

I have no problem suspending reality when it comes to a LIT story (14" cocks...), especially in a LW category, but narrative structures cannot simply be ignore, just to try to make the story as hot as possible - in this case, it actually did the opposite.

I'm down with more Burn The Bastard stories around here... as long as they're good.

A laughable story with no real characters in it at all 14” puts these guys in the horse cock range. If these horse cock authors don’t like having their stories laughed at they should look up some simple statistics on the internet. In actuality a 7” cock is very near the “freak” zone in size. So get real guys your “huge” stories are a laughable joke.

Pointless, Cred-less, Gross, Incomplete, clichéd, witless. OTT, it's perfect.

It sure looked to me like the author was dissing their own story. It...was a bunch of sexual things happening near the same time period, intercalcated with non-sexual things that really had no direction. It's superficial. It can't be fixed because it's too over the place. And if it was tied down, no BDSM no homo, it reads like a list of commands that would program an humanoid robot. It's mechanical. The experience isn't shared, and therefore has no chance of being erotic.

And its a stupid revenge that's stupid. Leading someone on and coercing them to watch revenge fucks is a dick thing to do. In this case, it would be a cunt thing. Cunt or dick, it's an asshole thing. Everybody has one of those, at least.

Tim took a video of her fucking and sent it to all her family and friends before leaving again, permanently. And a 14" cock? Was he really a horse named Eddy's? Both hysterically funny and really bad all at the same time.

... makes no sense.

makes no sense at all what did tim do to deserve such a whore for a wife

The whole damn thing makes no sense.

Tim made sure all her family, friends and acquaintances found out what she was doing. He took all the money from their accounts, closed the credit cards and cell phones accounts, cancelled the utilities and quit his job. She never heard from him again. She had to wait a year before paying for a divorce herself using abandonment as a reason. All her family and friends ignored her. She caught aids and died a year later. Because that's what happens when you act like a whore. The end.

Idiots.

This is nothing more than a crazy fantasy.

You people are nothing more than group home nominees.

Go back to your trailers.

One of the worst I have read. Terrible writing with a nonsensical story line.

2 14 inch cocks see Guinness world record

Both in pussy same time

He agreed to watch and be tied

Quit writing

so where is the endiig does tim grow some balls and leave forever he will never feel the sides of her pussy after that

Police were called a few days later when the smell caused the neighbours to complain.

What Police found when the burst open the door was a scene of absolute horror. They found two men tied to chairs and castrated and their cocks removed. They had also been beaten severely and must have died painfully.

They found a woman who had chocked to death when two 14 inch cocks were shoved down her throat so she could not breath.

The Police questioned the womans husband but he had an iron clad alibi. Him and 6 of his former Ranger buddies were drinking, in a town 30 miles away, celebrating the upcoming nuptials of their former Commanding Officer.

With the death of the twins Ted took over the running of the company on a temporary basis until the Board of directors made it official. Ted brought the company to new heights of profitability as the Twins were totally incompetant and spent more time fucking than running their fathers company.

Even if they existed, 14" is about 6" longer than the capacity of a normal human female. Any male waving more than 8" would find himself wearing a doughnut to limit penetration to the maximum capacity of a woman. These stories are, of course, not real but don't be ridiculous. Really bad writing.

So where was the story in this mess?

Might rate as the worst story published here. Between the bad writing and grammar couldn't even keep the names straight.

Every one has a 14” cock and a 42 IQ in this one.

14 inch cocks? you actually think that Tim is ok with these pieces of shit raising his daughter?I would see that those 14 inch cocks wouldn't do his Ex- wife much good

Wow you closeted gay males really, REALLY are size queens.

I'd call this drivel stupid but that would be a compliment in this case.

Zipparoo, the sperm donor who impregnated your mother should have pulled out....

Stupid shit.

.DOL

Even flies wouldn’t land on this pile of shit! Forget the two 14 inch cocks , why didn’t somebody just drive a Ford Pick-up truck up her snatch and park?!

WTF? You sick fuck.

I found nothing of value in this story.

If printed on paper the paper would be more valuable than the story.

(Author?) Has to be insane to think that this is a STORY ____________

A great revenge story but I find that the fourteen inch cocks to be unrealistic. Maybe ten inches.