by klendathu
And then the magic monkey jumped onto his Velociraptor and with a mighty shout of "Onward Broccoli Breath" he farted and departed.
My story was way more believable than yours.
Where is the incest??????
Incest is taboo, but Taboo isn't necessarily incest.
often times l will let a story sit for a day or two before submitting it. It's like that email you write but never send? methinks that's where this story sits
"Incest is taboo, but Taboo isn't necessarily incest."
This place is now full of idiotic "philosophers".
The initial details were fine but more descriptive details about her teacher and herself; looks etc. would help get a better picture of them as the story got HOT. I hope there is another chapter, so she gets to suck him off, tease him and then screw his brains out. Many good possibilities. Thank you.
Idea: A.. Grammar: A.. Story Detail: Incomplete- needs way more detail.
Keep writing- don't give up- nice first draft.
It's an excellent plot but needs more detail and more chapters, keep trying
in the next chapter does she find out he is her father that left when she was born?