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by klendathu

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Crappola

And then the magic monkey jumped onto his Velociraptor and with a mighty shout of "Onward Broccoli Breath" he farted and departed.

My story was way more believable than yours.

Where is the incest??????

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Ummmm... category Incest/TABOO

Incest is taboo, but Taboo isn't necessarily incest.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
l'm not sure that l can say anything, um. encouraging here

often times l will let a story sit for a day or two before submitting it. It's like that email you write but never send? methinks that's where this story sits

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
"Incest is taboo, but.." WRONG CATEGORY

"Incest is taboo, but Taboo isn't necessarily incest."

This place is now full of idiotic "philosophers".

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago

The initial details were fine but more descriptive details about her teacher and herself; looks etc. would help get a better picture of them as the story got HOT. I hope there is another chapter, so she gets to suck him off, tease him and then screw his brains out. Many good possibilities. Thank you.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Interesting Idea

Idea: A.. Grammar: A.. Story Detail: Incomplete- needs way more detail.

Keep writing- don't give up- nice first draft.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago

It's an excellent plot but needs more detail and more chapters, keep trying

dikupinyadikupinyaabout 4 years ago
so...

in the next chapter does she find out he is her father that left when she was born?

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