All Comments on 'Birds of a Feather Ch. 02'

Well the fast paced progression and a substantial step-un in kinkiness is actually paying off and the story is getting a lot more fun. The main characters are getting fully liberated and aren't afraid to show their true emotions anymore, the sex is even better now that there are no limits as to what to do together, and they even have friends that are willing to share some more of the intimate world with them. Bet that friends out of town that Cindy mentioned are Dan & Katie.

That being said you still have a great problem with grammar, like missing adjectives, wrong spellings or even conjugations. You did improve a bit from last time but there is a lot of work left to be done.

4* nonetheless as it was fun and I'm genuinely looking forward to more.

Thank you for taking the time to read my story and thank you for your comments. I'm aware that my stories have quite a few mistakes, and I make an effort to learn and improve on the finished product. I am mostly self-taught and would appreciate an editor, but I also realize that is asking a lot of a person to take their time to correct all of my mistakes. Comments such as yours let me know the primary areas where I need to concentrate my efforts. I'll do my best to keep the stories erotic and exciting. I'll also do the best I can to improve on the writing skills. Thank you for your feedback

... you really need an editor.