All Comments on 'Birthday Girl Ch. 01'

Very good, you have laid all the groundwork for what could be an interesting story series. This story could go in any one of several directions.

It was very enjoyable, and I found it difficult to believe that it was your first submission!

a good well written start to what could be a very fine story.

With a name like agera_r, and mentioning M3's and Supra's... I'd guess you were a car enthusiast. From one enthusiast to the next, good story. Interested to see where it goes

More please. :-)

Great effort, first or otherwise. I liked the tone of it, tough, hard-boiled humor. You drew your characters very well - I could see and hear them. This is crying out for a sequel.

Nicely put together and believable.

I might have taken it a bit further for a first chapter, but to each his own.

BTW, you might as well update your profile, your writing gives you away. Probably UK ?

You did a good job. I'm hooked and want to read the rest of your chapters. Please keep at it as you will only improve and you've shown you have talent.

One of the best if not the very best story I have read on Literotica. It is sad that it has been left hanging. I am hoping the author just has been busy and intends to come back and finish it. The nuanced writing, story telling and Brian’s hilarious inner monologue are pretty amazing ..

Finish this wonderful story.

7/6/2021----- don't bother reading! Another incomplete story on Lit

Don’t bother - the author didn’t.

Good beginning!

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