All Comments on 'Birthday Present For My Sister Ch. 02'

Nice build up and gentle love. Very nice.

... continue with these characters. I just love them. They've GOT to end up together for the long haul.

There is a third and final chapter pending, but "my sister" will be back in another story, also in an epilogue. As she points out, siblings don't simply forget each other and go different ways, even if they eventually marry someone else.

I really enjoy this story. I guess in the back of my mind I must have wanted to do my lttle brother.

Hummmm...I guess the guy is kind of a pussy. And fucking lazy. ....who tells a girl experiencing her first time to get on top? What an asshat! 'Uh no, I've only got two condoms' wtf? If you're going to fuck her, then FUCK HER! Loser! ...and had her straddle his face for the first time getting her pussy licked?! Who does that?! Dude is a wackjob, should just cut his dick off and go live in a cave and be a hermit, sheesh!

Interesting what fantasies immature guys have.

Hmmm is immature indeed. Someone who is sensitive to the girl's first time may well have her on top first, I did, and later married her. Also, her hips over his face gives her the ability to enjoy it best that way if she wants. Listen to the girl's body language for hell's sake. All great lovers do. Great story teller. Great stories, all fives, of course.

"We pulled the tabs of our beers. When I sank mine in my can, she also did."

I probably pulled that quote from Chapter One, but I was so irritated by your 'read my mind and fill in the blanks' writing style that I forgot to quote it and comment about it. That's definitely a throwback to the 1970s. You have to be older than 40 years of age to even know what a 'pull tab' on a beverage can is. Or was. The shell or gravel parking lots of convenience stores used to be full of them. In a way, I miss them. But I don't miss the litter left behind by worthless slobs.

As for your writing style, it still sucks. I'm barely able to piece together enough of your story in order to understand it. 2/5