by 69plus1
Loved the story but you should find a proof reader. Punctuation is the difference between "I helped my Uncle, Jack, off a horse" and "I helped my Uncle Jack off a horse".
That was great. Very exciting. Such a freedom of expression. I really enjoyed it. Loved the flow. You write so well. I can't imagine being able to add much in the form of criticism. Looking forward to you other works.