All Comments on 'Black & Tan Blues Ch. 01'

"Disco" was good, but the writing here is improved. I hope you post a chapter every day rather than waiting for the previous one to appear.

I think the same, this story is likely to be better than you previous. A very good 1ste chapter, hope you can keep this standard. G.Belgium

Gripping. Got myinsides turning which is what these stories are about.

Waiting for the next one please

I liked the build up. Of course in chapter two I do hope that the husband doesn't go back to the wife. I am all for a people getting back together buit for the right reasons. This wife has burnt her bridges. time to cut his losses.

You are a story teller in the true sense; hope your stay is a long one.

Sometimes there is nothing to talk about but keeping the slut away from the child and this could be one of those times. Get even and get away, she doesn't love you any more, great start, Thanks.

Loved your last story. This looks like another great one

One of the best stories Ive read lately. Great job.

Well! you've got me waiting for the confrontation -Let the bitch burn in hell!

another great story. Anxiously waiting for the next chapters.

like the last one. just maybe a little question you could do better in the next one. there is only one little mistake here. it's not erotic, sorry. and thats what I thought would be the reason reading stories at literotica

An excellent beginning to a story in Loving Wives. There aren't many of these in Loving Wives lately it seems. Donna was cheating on her husband and as yet there is really nothing he can physically do about the situation, even should he want to. You know, I think that this married couple truly belong together. Somehow, Donna is just a person who does what the group she's with does; and she seems to forget she's a married who honestly loves her hard working, well intentioned husband. I cannot wait to see how the story progresses in part 2. RAG

It seems like such a rotten shame that this sort of thing

has to happen but some people are exceptionally vulnerable and myopic about themselves and it does seem that Donna can not refuse a fix. There is sure to be a person in there who believes that she loves her husband and child but basically there is no way back because she can not even trust herself!

It's a great story in the line of plot where the husband takes action and does not tolerate the behavior of the wife, next gets even with her and leaves her sorry ass to be used and abused in the end by the bad guys her new friends really are, making her regret and realise how stupid she has been. Have her forced into nonconsensual gangbang by her new lover, so she experience the trouble she has brought herself into

I am hoping the author does not make a truly stupid ending like he did with his 1st story. In this one she is a druggie and whore.

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Hopefully the author doesnt have the husband say "well she is a Good monther...."

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LMAO!!!

<i>"My marriage MAY be over but this isn't." </i>

you all read chapter 1.... How could it NOT be over?

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This is a great start to what could be a great story.

BUT we all KNOW forced Reconciliation is coming.

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We all KNOW it. Proof? Look the this author's last story DISCO NIGHTS. In THAT story the Husband works at an Auto plant... same as here.

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In that story The wife is seen and caught at the Disco. In THIS story in Black guy white woman night club.

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In the DISCO NIGHT STORY...the husband is portrayed as a Man of Honor & comittment and stays with a repulsive whore wife for 19 years... out of concern for the kids growing up in stable home.

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Which is patently absurd. The Men who are THOSE kind of good parents who are THAT concerned about their Kids so NOT still Fuck their whore wives for 19 years.

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<b>You see if both parents are dead from an STD becuse the wife was cheating ALL of those 19 years who raises the kids? </b>

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In chap 2 in DISCO NIGHTS when the husband finds out his wife has been fucking 1 guy she met at the Disco he discovers that his wife fucked ANOTHER man she met at the Disco... THEN two more guys who were friends of husband from his work... THEN husband's old boss.... and when he was in the Army.... and ..... and..... and.

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In chpt3 of DISCO NIGHTS the husband makes a big production about divorcing her. <b>But the author NEVER explains how a Man that committed to being a good dad and providing a stable family could still fuck a whore wife and risk His own death.</b>

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Hells bells maybe I am 100% wrong but the start of this story and DISCO NIGHTS seem too close.

<p>....for this story</p>

<p>Disco nights to me had a problem of if he wasn't going to do anything about it, why did he waste all that time getting mad at her and her lover</p>

<p>This one seems eerily similar to the opening, but I'm hoping that after creating an over abundance of reasons for the husband to find a wife who doesn't disrespect him, their marriage and their family as this wife does.</p>

<p>Interesting opening, just curious about the ending though</p>

-Risq

Is there some rule on Literotica that husbands must be stupid ass hole. Dumbo has to go to black nightclub -for what.-- so he can see what Trevor has already told him?

the Ct. Yankee

I hope your second chapter is a good as the first chapter.

One commentator asked why husband went to nightclub to see what his friend had told him. The only logical reason would be immediate confrontation. And yet in order to draw out what seems to be a cur and dry story the author does not have this confrontation. You get 25 for the writing which is quite good. And 25 for the story background. You lose 50 for the husband leaving the bar without telling his soon to be ex-wife not to come home ever. I know you are dying to describe the sex scene between the slut wife and her black lover, and you could have done this well, if the husband did not know about his wife's activities. Now it will be just to inflame the bigots on this site that do not like interracial adultery. All the cliches can now be used in your story. She is lonely and so when to find some companionship and it is the husband's fault. She did not choose a black man but after seeing or feeling his huge cock she could not help herself. She really loves her family and it was just a momentary slip. And the final cliche will the be the husband somehow agreeing with her. Sad really that you can't have an original thought in your head to put down on paper.

<p>I'm looking forward to seeing the next part.</p>

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I enjoyed the way you introduced your characters to us. It is easy to place myself in the central character's shoes, even though the situation is not close to my life. There are a lot of things done very well in this first chapter.

Please post the next chapter quickly. ikj

I said it in my first comment, I think it's a good story. Nice build up and determination. I hope indeed that the same

standard can be kept in the next chapter(s). ** But, I don't agree with some other comments. Why confront his wife in this club. He needed black protection to get in and safely out. So a confrontation in there was excluded if you think logically. And from the last line, at least to me, it isn't clear at all that there possibly could be a reconciliation. On the contrary, my interpretation is that his marriage is over and revenge on the people concerned is on the way, and a confrontation would just have alerted the others **** As to what het job in the autoplant has to do with it, I don't see the relevance. How many other authors haven't done the same by picking characters who "neglect" their spouse : not everybody is a lawyer who works long hours and takes work back home, or a business man constantly on the move to boost his business for later benefits of the family, or an engineer, or rich by inheritance, etc... *** It's the privilege of the author to situate the story wherever he/she wants. And how many times haven't we read about some "superman" skilled in martial arts, ex special forces, etc... Although most people are not, it doesn't disturb me to follow the storyline. *** I think this author writes fluently and with great potential even if I would like to see some situations better explained, like in Disco Nights how a husband could "pretend" for 19 years and how his daughters figured out that their mother was cheating. But if the author isn't compelled to do so, so be it. And if it's for some dragged out desciptions of sex scenes, the're plenty of those around with no other purpose or no other story development. I think it's not really necessary. The mind is the best with a vivid imagination, without needing the "clichés" of blacks with foot long cocks or hung like a horse and able to fuck 20 or 30 times a day or whatever. Another constant in those stories is that many of them involve other "brothers" to fuck the women. Could it be that they need assistance to get the job done properly ? As for the domination of white wives. If you have nothing, you can't loose nothing. If there's no love involved, there's just plain sex without holding back. If you need drugs to control the partners, you're just week, scrupulous or however you want to name it. If it's to make money out of it, that happens every day all over the world. *** In other words, there's nothing new under the sun. It's been said, written about or shown somewhere else. No, what is important is the way you bring it and this author does a very good job in this respect. G.Belgium.

Keep writing! Though a new writer, itmgr2010 is one of the best of this genre.

I liked your story (or at least the opening chapter) but suggest that you submit the following chapters sooner. Perhaps typing it up as one and then submitting a new chapter every day or 2 like some writers do. If it's a good story you want to read it sooner and nothing is more frustrating than re-reading something as you only vaguely remember the character settings etc.

Keep writing!

this story is too much like disco nights,even the part about army time in germany.... please finish with a happy ending for him and the daughter.... maybe v.d. for her and some jail time, loss of job,any thing like that is fine by me.

THAT YOU MIGHT FINISH THIS BEFORE THE END OF THE YEAR?

when you will continue this????

another new author starting a story then quitting. Very bad behavior and a shame as he seemed to have great potential.

Please do finish this tale, I really want to know what happens. I may agree with some of the commentators that the loving wives category tend to have similar themes and vengeance part can be sometimes be OTT but ...

It doesn't matter, a good story told by a master storyteller is a joy! I enjoy your style, please continue.

G.

Great start - I can't wait for the rest.

Can you give us an update on when you will finish? Thanks Great story!

K.K., curious2c, Longhorm, and others at their best

Great beginning. The compelling sense of time and place is reflected in the atmosphere, period specific details and the build up of the characters. There is a great deal of tension being built slowly and steadily (I was fully expecting that when the husband was coming home early he would find the wife in a compromising position - but you fooled me...) Very good job! <P>

We still don't know much about Donna - the person, but we do get the picture of the couple's history and their life at present (it sucks of course, but every thing is ‘under the rug’). <P>

The ending of this chapter was the strongest part, with the damning evidence which augmented the overall cold and disrespectful behavior of a spouse who had already left the marriage (mentally and emotionally long time before the shocking scene at the bar. <P>

All that is left is to see is if the author will give in to some personal issues (what ever they may be) and allow this great start to go to the dumps in the following chapter, or will the husband be allowed to 'grow some' and get away from this skunk wife?

But I don't think they had 'happy meals' in the early 70's. I certainly never had one. It was a product much later. I also thought they didn't have Kinko's but that was started in 70.

A tiny speed bump

If it is such a dangerous place for white males he would be stupid to insist on going since he could easily get a black PI to take photos and a video. That would be better than taking an unnecessary risk plus he would have the added benefit of a licenced PI report, photos, and videos as evidence.

He is such a dumb ass that he deserves for he to cheat on him. After all, it is her right to fuck blacks since she has to live with a stupid ass.

I know the main plot is the marriage that's DOA once 'Donna went dark'. Yet during the several timed I've reread this what also leaps forward is the wonderful portrayal of racial tensions that existed post MLK & Malcom X assassinations .

The trip to the wrong side of town is fraught with tension. Now interracial couples are unremarkable . Well it wasn't back then & the author perfectly capture the incredulity & outrage that an average guy would feel about his wife's choice of "friends". *****

How brainwashed you have to be to say that internet was "invented" by some liberal fuck called gore...

Ever ! I always come back to his stories when I am disheartened at the stupidity of some writers on this site.

Thank you itmgr2010 for sharing.

What a loss to the readers of Lit ! 5***** of course.

More than one way too - burn her to the ground -

of literature 1 star,,,,,,,,maybe

This has me on the edge of my seat. Incredible writing and a heart wrenching scenario. Five stars.

Although they tend to be longer than most stories, they are extremely well-written and interesting. I just LOVE the word "disabuse." Plus this writer got "neither"..."nor" correct - very unusual for LW authors.

what the fuck are the politicians of today?????????????????????????????????????

the tale is a 3 star for me.

I am gripped by this. Oh dear as to the behaviour of white women who go for the black cock.

Maybe you can use some of that intelligence to write coherent sentences with proper punctuation. I hope the conversation that you have with your fictional black girls is packed with more intellect than that abortion of writing that you call a comment.

Still five stars. Still love it. Still a favorite.

A cheating wife story that goes from bad to worst. A perfect definition of bitter-sweet love lost story. Great author who drags to thru the worst of the worst of the heartbreak of a cheating spouse. F*ck up? Yeah...great story telling?...Yeah.

while the pages are white for to be contrastable, TK U MLJ LV NV

Always bring out the racist shit. That gets the white boys stirred up.

You want rascist? Try reading some IR shit. Can you spell hypocricy?

Black bad guy? It's not an impossibility. Deal with it.

5*

Hopefully her new boyfriend doesnt O.J. her slutty ass someday. The husband should put two in each. One in the crotch and one in da head.

Hope Ken, Tony, and Trev can take these assholes down. Take Donna out with the rest of the trash.

Has me tense (although not to the point of shaking, yet).

But it is wordy. Found myself scanning and skipping parts that were not necessary to get the idea or further the plot.

Good language use.

Great storytelling skills.

I prefer REASONABLE, well told reconciliation stories. But her cheating is so egregious (bad and blatant) and continued (not a one-time slip), that I expect to be disappointed with a reconciliation in this situation (it fails my "reasonable" criterion).

Paul in Oklahoma

Why would you write a story about such a pussy??

Pictures and divorce

Go beat some ass

who was with Samantha while both parents were at the club?

Not even going to bother. It's obvious this is going to devolve into pathetic racist bullshit. Almost makes me want to continue to see if the husband ends up with a non white woman because white men just love to assuage their guilt by throwing in that trope. You know, to prove they aren't what they really are. They love people from different races, so long as they aren't like "that" and you know what's funny? These ass clowns actually believe they aren't racist. They are first to spew "all lives matter" they claim to not see color. That one kills me. It's such horseshit that you might as well admit you are racist. -ss77

lol.. white people fetishing black men is some peak insecurity.. bring us some variety dude.

lol.... white women that like black men are by far the biggest sluts out there

Great story- very well written and good development of the characters

Not quite as good as the easily impressed wish it were.

Ill try chapter 2 and see where that leads. Not holding my breath.

Don't understand why he had to see it before marriage over.

Yes confirm but already heard and seen enough earlier to end it.

Another cheating whore story. Hope hubby divorces her and beats the shit out of the guy.

Like the reading hate the cheating. Hope she pays!

He is told. Has money. Get proof and done.

Femdom agitprop. Good luck with that.

Racist shit.

A long way to get to the cheating. Seems like this is going to be a long, slow, boring process.