All Comments on 'Blind Date Awakening'

Short and pleasant story of brother/sister love encounter. Straight and to the point - smooth and easy reading - no heavy drama - satisfying conclusion - well written.

Great story, you should write another chapter to give it a proper ending.

Why did the Karen character continually address Charles as "big brother"? I doubt that it would occur in real life. I seldom address my sister as " big sister".

In my experience with family love once you pass the threshold of love to feelings of making love you stop addressing each other by title and more as a lover such as babe or honey, sugar anything but the real title of the family member . Keeping it feeling less taboo and more socially accepted.

So lose the big brother comments in future chapters to make even more interesting and believable . Good start.

Is it possible that Stan and Lori KNEW they were brother and sister? When is Chapter two going to be posted?

The first Anon- states that she was on a second honeymoon and at the graveside. Read the damn thing again.

His friend and the wife were the ones on the second honeymoon. That is why they did not know that she was his sister when the wife met her at the gym. I liked the hook, him reliving the past every night while barely making it through the days like a zombie. Then, his assistant tells him about this blind date and I was pleasantly surprised from then on. If this is the first story then I can only say, Encore, Encore. Cheers

I appreciate your feedback! Hopefully it will make me a better writer. I have submitted Chapter 2 for approval. I'm pretty sure there will be at least a 3rd chapter. After that, we'll see!

Good story. They have different last names..chapter 2 is a go

For a first story, you have done very well.

On to chapter 2 - really looking forward to it !

I enjoy your writing, for the most part. You've done a great job framing the story line without wandering off on theme irrelevant topics. However, a good edit would have taken your story from being a good read to a compelling read. Storytelling is more than a great idea. Using the right words and phrasing can greatly enhance your story and your readers' experience. Regarding prepositional pronouns:

Incorrect: "...of he and Jessica."

Correct: "...of Jessica and him."

The word 'of' is a preposition, making the words immediately following it part of a prepositional phrase. Prepositional pronouns include: me, him, her, us, and them. There are a handful of other issues but again, allowing someone to help edit your work before you publish would help your story.

Love this story so far! Hot, hot, hot. Looking forward to more.

One of the goals of a blind date is to find out if you have anything in common. If you can get along. Their friends should be proud, they found two people with mutual interests, backgrounds, personalities, who probably even had similar physical characteristics. Who knew?

For me, let's go to my place, came pretty fast and it's ok for us to do this without guilt because it's purely therapeutic not romantic was one of the best examples of rationalizing I've seen.

But I'm a reader not a writer.

This is a very good story. I lost my wife a few years ago, we were High School sweethearts and she died unexpectedly after 30+ years of marriage. The author is a very realistic writer.

5 stars. although not a lot of sex, a great start to what hopefully is a really compelling and erotic story. well written. on to chapter 2.

Loved it and hope you write some more soon. I would love to follow these two as their relationship deepens hopefully.

Beautiful

Love story with a twist, perfect can't wait till the next chapter 5++stars

Eeew. Incest is not ok. This is gross.

arsenelupin66: Seiously? It’s in the Incest category. What did you expect?

Really special.

Well that opener was brutal. Telling of a wonderful, lifelong, loving relationship, only to have it snuffed out by cancer. Yes, they did have many years together and 2 daughters that are off living their own lives, but it seems cruel to snatch his soulmate away like that. Admittedly it's better than saying she cheated and I suppose this is the lesser of two evils for setting the scene in an incest story.

Charles and Karen seem like a nice match, although it's early days. I hope their love blossoms into something deep and wonderful, that rivals and perhaps even eclipses what he had with his beloved soulmate, Jessica.

Huge huge hole that they weren’t there for each other in their times of need. Necessary for the story to work, I guess.

Echoing the comment regarding arsenelupin66. Dude, really?

Romantic, tragic, sweet, and sexy

What more does one need?