All Comments on 'Blood and Love Ch. 08'

ok, i really need to see you change this up from Vamp Diaries soon. I mean, it is almost exact, even some of the names are the same. Please show me that you are making it your own. Right now, it is VD with same sex characters. The scene with the old man was a bit off since the girls wouldn't say 'we have to take him to a psychiatrist twice a week' ...a more natural thing to say would be 'granddad sometimes gets confused' or something like that.

I see you have promise as a writer, so just go out on a limb with your own ideas and I think you write well enough that it will be a great story. Looking forward to you making it your own!

I'm a huge vamp fan so I'm familiar with most current, pop-fiction fang stories. This is so Vampire Diaries. I'd love to see you take this story in a more unique direction. Find what you really like about your characters and let that shine. Use the relationships around you as inspirational. Good or bad.

Good luck!