by MorbidAngelRen
Well written! This story really drew me in. The only thing that bothered me was the ending. It appeared to be a bit abrupt.
I would have preferred they either let her go or make her one of the undead.Please keep writing.
ya know its funny how you write a piece about a sadist with a website of snuff material, and it gets rejected.. but write a piece on a vampire, rape and throats beign torn.. and your popular.. yeah Im bitter.. but eh.. Im over it.. I did LOVE ya story though.. vampires are a big turn on for me... it was well put together.. keep writing (jokerchyld69@yahoo.com)
Id have liked the vampire theme to run a little deeper,
Maybe some blood drinking during the sex...
I liked it. But you should come up with your own names for the characters, rather than taking names from Anne Rice novels. :)
Any relation to a Lestat? But then, shh. Ms. Rice hates fanfictions haha. Very well written, I thought. Sexy vampire stories are hard to get right without making them lame and gushy (a la Twilight) or just downright smutty (Sunshine).
This started out romantic and nice, I thought it would be really good. And then it just got stupid. If you didn't want to make it romantic like it started, why didn't you give the girl submissive tendencies? So she'd enjoy the treatment? I like BDSM stuff but not like this. Try again.
What color are his eye's? I always love to capture the image in my mind, and I wish you had spoke of his eye color. In any case I just guessed they were light blue, almost white. I do not know, just a guess. Really loved this tale by the way.
It was great, listen not to negative asshole who do not even have a name, or any bad, annoying neg comments. They do not matter. You have courage in sharing this wonderful tale with us and to hell with them if they do not like it.
Very unexpected yet a very good story. It draws you in as a "love" story, but takes an unexpected turn for the worse. I give it a 5 star rating, dreadfully descriptive and Loved it.
This isn't rape fantasy it's just straight up sexualization of a brutal gangrape and murder. It's a shame since the writing wasn't crap