All Comments on 'Bobbie's Lesson'

Smoking hot, non-stop action. Can teenagers really be that horny? I'm worn out just from reading. Moreover, I can see why this story was difficult to categorize. Good, explicit writing.

You got yourself a hot story but i think there are some issues to rework. i had to reread the first bit there several times to try and clarify if it was bobby or sam that was givin her the go. it reads as both. Snag an editor and you'd be fine. also, would like a litte more. twas rather short. Great work!

Not seeing the ambiguity picked up by the comment below. Anybody else? If you steer me towards it, I'll take a crack at smoothing it out. Also, folks craving more story, like the anony, are invited to wade into my multi-chapter "Hero's Life." It's the same characters a few months earlier. Cheers! -PacoFear

I haven't got one complaint about this story . Loved every minute and i believe you should continue with Bobby's afventure and let him have Heather for desert every so often . Really enjoyed it .

wouldn't see a need for bobby to get heather again. why should hero have to share his girlfriends? he's already had to share heather with sam (way back when), it worked out well (extremely so!) for the 3 of them but I agree with the way you've portrayed it here - he's jealous and wants to reclaim his ladies but understands heather's need to complete connections. realisticaly throughout the story he's had to do more sharing than they have, I think he's been more than generous. hell, I would have ranked the story higher if he had let sam hit the little punk. just my thoughts, i've really enjoyed all the stories youve written here and have ranked everything else at 100%. keep up the good work!

For the Anony below: It's funny you mentioned the fight scene because I worked through several iterations of that opening scene in my head. Along one imaginary axis, I've always pictured Hero and Sam as a yin-yang thing. Early on, I coached their respective alignments with a comment from Samantha that went something like, "I think Heather has a good moral compass. It's not permanently pointing north like yours and not spinning wildly like mine."

By the time this story takes place, Hero knows what Samantha is capable of and he says as much here: "Little Samantha had a gift for violence." For what happens when an unchecked Samantha unleashes on someone who hurts her loved ones, try "Sam's Short Dark Tale" and/or "Hero's Life Ch. 15." That won't happen when Hero is around, his b'al taschit oath (See Hero's Life Ch. 05 for that) compels him to save others from harm. For example, he moves without having to think to catch Heather in Ch. 01 and cushion Sam's fall in Ch. 06. This aspect of Hero and how he might balance Samantha is one of the things that Heather appreciates early with her connect-the-dots brain: "She's sad, Hero. Sad and beautiful and broken. Please can't we help her?" (Ch. 04).

I can't claim that this all fits together well, but it does fit together in some way. As you no doubt suspect, I'm not a professional writer - I'm just doing my best to type up the movies playing on my mental movie screen. And of course, also make it really, really sexy. XD

Tell me you don't waste good scotch in coffee.

Please, and The Macallan is not spelled with an i.

The anony below makes a good point. Not about the whiskey in sweet coffee (I've done that on occasion) but about the proper spelling of Macallan. He missed the even bigger sin I committed though. I later mis-described Macallan as Irish. That should have said "Jameson." Like more than a few single malt fans I know, I imagine Hero and Heather as looking down their noses at blends and/or Irish. The cheeky jab I was going for there was that, from his perspective, the only thing an Irish blend would be good for is dosing a cup of morning coffee. Irish fans, flame away if you must but please know that I did this "in character."

I'll fix it as soon as I have time to find the darn draft to tweak and resubmit it. Thanks for keeping me honest.

This story was really good, and the story of sam's, heather's and hero's love triangle was great as described in all your "Hero's life" stories but I still think that "Strawberries and Bubblegum" was better, mainly because the relationship between Heather and Berry felt more like best friends who loved each others discovering ways of making each other happy through sex, as opposed to Sam and Heather having sex to feel connected with each other. I am sorry if you don't like my opinion, there's a high chance I'm wrong, but I'm just a hopeless romantic who wonders what would have happened if "Saving Berry" wouldn't have happened. Or if Heather woulnd't have found Hero in "Peaches and Honey 2" Don't you also wonder?

For TheUnder: yeah, there is something special about 'first loves' like the one I described in Strawberries and Bubblegum. The innocence is incredibly appealing. If that's what you like, steer towards "first time" stories. I have yet to write a pure one of those. As for me, the relationship between Berry and Bubblegum in S&B was one of my favorites to write. It just sort of flowed, partly because I had the backbone of a real life story to hang it off of as I mentioned in the opening note. The way Berry half-jokingly says "What kind of girls do you like?" and Bubble answers with "I think I like the you kind" should feel real and honest because that conversation actually happened for my college gal pal. Frankly that exchange is what made me want to write the tale from the beginning. I've had that exchange rattling around in my head for over a decade. As for the sex, I had to completely make that up because L.C. did not go into excruciating detail on that part and the descriptions she did share are fuzzy for me because it was a few years ago. But because I had such a firm grip on the people and it was my first crack at a lesbian story, I concocted some of my favorite sex scenes for S&B. From the darkened shower sex scene to the g-spot lesson to the tantric sex finale, these remain some of my favorite scenes two dozen stories and a year later. As for whether I wonder what might have happened without 'Saving Berry' - yeah maybe - but I personally find the end result I reached more satisfying. Heather, Samantha, and Hero - three people touched by their own tragedies found each other and knitted together like little puzzle pieces. Don't despair, if you know my penchant for trussing up loose ends, you may realize that it's just a matter of time before I swing to Berry and Bobby's story that was left dangling at the end of Bobbie's Lesson. He'll be Berry's first guy and there's plenty of mileage, of the tender, learning sort that you might like, to be had there. Be patient, Under, I'll get there someday. There's miles to go before I sleep. -PF

This story had it all, a kind of jack-of-all-trades. I really liked the love triangle. I'm going to have to read those other stories now. Thanks for some great writing!

it started good but when heather said she and hero were staying to help sam with bobbie it kind of went askew after that i mean why would heather want to stay and watch her brother and sam have sex and why would hero want to stay i think a normal guy would have left after saying you can stay but it's to weird for me just not my cup of tea i guess

The story is in the incest category so... yeah... you kind of need to be willing to go along with that idea if you're going to enjoy it.

Certainly one of the best stories I've read here... top 5, definitely.

Good job!

One thing I would like to ask, however.... seeing as this story was so fabulous, I'd love to read the rest. However, I would hate to read them out of order. Could you possibly type up a super-quick list mentioning your stories in chronological order, please? I'd greatly appreciate it.

Thanks, and keep writing!

Check my bio. I posted it there a minute ago. I'd actually put a recommended reading order together a few months back and was e-mailing it to folks that requested it via private feedback. The bio's easier I suppose. :D

Hope this helps!

-PF

I just read them in the order they were posted. Although I cheated and read all the way through Hero's story. We're starting to flush out some of the concerns I had about that story with these others.

you say you have a penchant for trussing up loose ends yet you totally left WORDS ON SKIN with out an end and say you won't give it one doesn't sound like trussing up loose ends to me sounds two faced

If you send me a private message, I'll do my best to explain my writing philosophy. This was the third time you posted a hostile comment calling me "two-faced" and the second time you posted it to this particular story. I am deleting your comments and will continue to do so.

This one came to me as a coming of ae story for Bobbie. He needs to do some maturing, but he seemed to get his act together in the end thanks to the trio's help. Nice story and nice work. ^__^

That was SUCH a wonderful story; I enjoyed it immensely. You have a great writing style. Can't wait to read more. ^.^

Great little story with very little conflict on your others. Its nice how your characters seem to fit together because in real life they never seem to.

Well done

Quick question this is that in this series I read all the others. In this Heather doesn't want her parents to know about Samantha but they get married in the end? I assume her parents didn't mind after all hey?

Just a friendly question it doesn't demand an answer. lol Its all a wonderful story sad to say good bye though.

PF...what more can I say. Great stories...the best I've read on here. Thank you. Wish it didn't say Anonymous but I never did get a login yet. Ignore the freaks...you have a gift for story telling.

you deffinetly have a talent to be proud of, my man! very nice. ;)

Reading your stories has been mind blowing! You have a serious talent my friend, and I will be waiting for your next love filled erotic masterpiece! I just hope it's a brother sister story, but with your talent anything you pen will be brilliant!

That is all.

I have read hundreds of stories on this website since 2009; hands down you are the best. You give us just enough story to make it interesting, almost plausible. You also give us enough naughty sex to make us come. Keep it up. Don't stop!

My greatest compliment to a writer on this site is when I wonder if they'e simply changed the names of people in actual events, your work makes me wonder

so this comment is about all of your stories well the ones that i have read so far as i plan to read them all you have a talent.

I knew there was a reason I made you a favorite author on the first story I read. Your stories do not disappoint.

one criticism the guy telling the story must have been watching Bobbie and Heather and been very uncomfortably horny himself! but only Sam got her perks!

I don't want Heather and Bobby to be over. I think he should date Stacey for awhile and maybe a few other girls - but then realize that Heather is the one for him and with his newfound confidence and poise sets out to steal Heather from Hero and Sam - for good. You have to write this story!!! Please!

Why oh why was my education not like that.

A small criticism if I may, I find it difficult to place characters when they are swapped from christened name, to family name, to lovers name, to nickname and such.

Sorry that's just me, I have difficulty remembering names when I have been formally introduced.

Was gobsmacked by the story.

Well I've now read everything on here you have read Paco Fear and glad I read this last its a beautifully written love story with enough erotic parts to keep it moving I will be book marking your stories and reading them again and again

I have read most of your stuff and have a few more to go. The blood drained out of my face. "Aww, hell no! You want to know where my limit is? It's right there! I'm not helping you seduce your gay brother."

This made me laugh so hard my head started to hurt.

I'm confused, because I've been reading in your recommended order & am wondering what went on between Stacey & Heather to reconcile? It was pretty clear that Stacey had walled up & wanted Heather out of her life, & Heather was left heartbroken until Sam (& then Hero) helped her heal. But there's no mention of their coming to some resolution of the conflict that drove the wedge between them. So, to have Heather just up & go grab Stacey & bring her into Bobby's life is kinda confusing. I was way from left field, like wait, hold on, there's something askew with this scenario. Something was missing in the timeline.

Love your writing big guy, it's way thick! (Ha! Couldn't help it.) Hell, I don't do guys anymore, haven't for a long time but I'd consider doing you...

;-)

Erin

Write about Bobbie and I Stacey

I want to be any of those four people! :)

Bobbie and his sister finally connect - something they both admitted to wanting - and now she sets him up with her past lover and he just waltzes out with her without a care in the world - so let me understand this - in a brother/sister incest story they both walk away from each other???? Love your stories but in this case wanted Bobbie and Heather together and Hero and Tight Buns gone - and Hero acts and talks like he is so much older and wiser than Bobbie - what is he like 22???? Can't be much older - strikes me as greedy prick....

I think I like the incest better. heather found a higher plane with two scum of the earth whores? she will NEVER find ANYTHING but hell. at least Robert was saved for sooo much better.

I really felt sorry for Bobby, and how Heather offers him her castoffs, unknown to him, no matter how hot the girl might be, it's just another way to screw up his head.

It was pretty cruel of Heather to be with him once if she didn't intend to continue things, considering how he felt about her, a bit of a cluster fuck all around.

The POV is a bit too smug an asshole for my taste, or maybe it just feels like that because I felt sorry for Bobbie.

Bobbie should just cut Heather out of his life as quickly as possible, and get his head screwed on straight, considering how distraught he seemed, I don't think it's good for his mental health to be anywhere near her. Attending college in a different state would be a good way to do so.

I disagree with some of the comments here. I liked Hero...I thought he was a nice guy. I was sad that Heather hurt her brother after they shared something so special, but at least she tried to make up for it.

After having read all the stories, in order, about Heather and her 'adventures', I can only come to two very distinct conclusions: first, that Pacofear is an excellent storyteller, capable of playing the heartstrings of his audience with great skill, and two, that this here is where the story turned into a bittersweet ending, one that even a guy without a 'knack' for 'connections' can see. If taken alone, or if Paco had not written the next two chapters, it might have been fine, no harm no foul, and Hero would have come out with both of his girls intact. But only the blind or the ignorant will miss her obvious comment "I want/think you'll be like Hero when you get older", and what that actually means for her current boytoy. Continued in Berry's Second Chance.

The love between the Brother and his Sister was pure, strong and unbreakable. Your ending was cruel, with no compassion or empathy for the love they both possessed for each other. You should have them embrace it and start a life together with out the interference of the other two perverted sexual addicts.

... about any "cruelty" on Heather's part. Obviously she had a plan to give two more people she loves something that they both weren't quite aware that they needed. To be together!

She taught Bobby what it is to make love to a woman, which is completely different than just having sex, in order for Berry's first time to be right.

Keep in mind what Stacey has been through in the past.

Heather did what she did so that Stacey's first time could be as special, and filled with love(which she certainly deserved), without the clumsiness that often is part of a guy's first time.

Bobby would now have the knowledge of how to take things slowly, gently, and lovingly both with and for Stacey, as it should be, all things considered.

Initially, it may have been upsettingl to Bobby, but he'll thank Heather later.

Well done, Paco.

In this story she comes straight from work, with Heather a bit more than half an hour after Heather left the group. Was that set up? Seems to me a very short time for a reconciliation, even down to kissing at traffic lights.

About 9 months later we are given a different version in chapter 1 of Berry's Second Chances (can you have more than one second chance?). There is a phone call in which Stacey is dragged back into Heather's life for a coffee and an invite to take her brother out on a date.

I only mention because, as far as I can see, no one else has mentioned it.

Shame the series seems to have ended.

So cruel for Bobbie to give him a taste of what he wants and that's it! She 'cheated' on Hero and Sam and at least Hero was jealous for no reason. There was nothing in the ending of the story for me to like. I ended up pissed off. Too late of course by some years. Usually your stories leave me wanting more but this was not one of those. So you got a tease of a sister and cheating in the same story. :( If I was Bobbie it'd be a hell of a long time before I talked to my sister again!

Great read

Can't wait to read Hero series.

Heather was admirable kudos

I checked, it's lay/lie/laid, not lied (unless you are fibbing)

Count me a fan PacoFear!

Unpleasant to say the least.

What a horrible bunch. Heather used her brother's love for her against him to satisfy some group orgy urge of her trio. The worst betrayal was disguising it as 'helping him out for his own good', just to discard him when they got their jollies from using him.

If I was Bobby, I'd never speak to her again.

Then she care fly pressed her other little thumb into Heather's ass.

Great wonderful story

Excellently writer. Very descriptive. Maybe too much so. I got totally lost in the characters.

Robert annoyed me...and I was totally with him!! Great writing.

Sorry but no the sister used him and his feelings for her to make her group and her fantasy come true she was a complete bitch I understand that some people like that and it's not there fault that they wasn't raised properly but it's not my cup of tea however you should write a 2nd Part and name it a sisters lesson Bobbie gets his revenge

@marshalla in what universe did the sister do that out of love there was nothing loving about that she used his feelings for her to realize some fantasy her and her 2 friends had then panned him off on someone else knowing she betrayed him she used his feelings for her to have sex with him than just ditched him like he meant nothing if I was him I would disown her have nothing else to do with her or her little group of friends

From reading other comments I gather this was a next chapter of a longer story. Perhaps that’s why I didn’t get Involved in the story, but I didn’t think a lot of it. 3 stars at best.

Bill S.

One of the Best Anal scenes I have read on this site...Samantha is Any Man's Dream Anal Partner...Mine was Melissa...While not a Tiny Ballerina, She knew what she wanted and how to get it...We both worked for a Large Liquor Wholesaler in Baltimore 40 some years ago...They held Monthly Sales Meetings on Thursday Nights and after the BS was over we all went out to drink...This one A-Hole got Stupid and would not leave Melissa alone (Blonde Big Tit German Girl in her mid 30's) I did not like the guy to begin with so I jacked him up by the neck and dropped him on the floor...Needless to say Melissa was Impressed and Very Grateful...Took me back to her condo and proceeded to Fuck My Brains out...The Final Act that night (Early Morning?) was to ask me to "Please Put it in My Ass"...Damn, had never done that and told her so...Her responds was "Don't Worry...I will Show you How"...Woke up the next morning with my Cock in Her Mouth asking if I wanted to do it again! Bill K

"...Bobbie shivered as she lathed his sensitive end. ..."

If she had it'd be much shorter and bleeding from a stump:

because a lathe is a machine for cutting wood or metal turning the piece against a set of adjustable cutting tools...

Perhaps you intended some other word?

Good yarn.

Laved (not 'lathed') has a meaning similar to 'washed'

For all those misinterpreting things story, go go the author's biography; he gives the order to read the stories.

Sam has a hangup that precludes vaginal intercourse with anyone but Hero. Stacy was Heather's former younger, soccer teamate, and lesbian lover. Thus, Heather knew how experienced Stacy was and wanted her brother suitably prepared for Stacy.

Makes lots of sense when you understand the backstory. GREAT writing. I miss this author a lot.

Mfj

What a great story. Amazing characters. Well done.

I would love to read a sequel with Bobby and his sis. Hoping the series will go on

My second time reading this, 9 months apart. My comments stayed the same,but I rated it one star higher this time.

Bill S.

Good job, thanks for sharing your work!

Six stars. Maybe more.

The end was fucked up. Heather didn't have to crush him like that. Brother gets sisters hand me downs and showers would have been nice. I could say more but there was secrecy that left me sour.

Didn't like. This whole series is silly. The more stories you write about Heather the more I dislike her. I just about puked at her little speech on her "we have something special and I can't risk it" LOL what BS!! How many men and women has she screwed since the start of their triangle? Who keeps bringing people into their triangle to screw? If she's a nimpho fine but stop the lie she committed to and in love with the other two.

Really involved with each other. Someone was grooming a long time for this incest relationship to be natural. No, 'I can't believe we did this!' More like, "It's about time!" Mom and dad had to be in on it.

I have to say that was a really wonderful prequel, interesting being told from the other character we didn’t really get to know. I love little girls/women and Sam being Latin by the sounds of it would be exactly my type. My ex was Argentinian and 5 foot tall And very similar to your description of Sam sadly it didn’t last past two daughters and 20 years.

I loved the sex scenes especially the love scene with the brother and sister, the description of the childhood relationship was so beautifully done, it would not be hard to imagine. But I never had a sister a year above or below me in age that was a firecracker, my sister was eight years younger and we were never that close as I left home very young. And she was only a kid.

I am really enjoying this writer style and character building skills very sexy and very well written seems like it’s written by a female because of the understanding from female perspective .