All Comments on 'Bobby Wants It In His Butt!'

What were you trying to accomplish here?

What a waste of a post!!!

Assuming you did 98% dialogue on purpose, even the experts would rarely write a story this way. You really need to describe what is happening, the individual's thoughts, the scene, the sexual details, etc. So, IF this was an experiement, I'm sorry to say it failed.

What a crap story.

yeah, so i didn't even finish, since you couldn't figure out who the hell was talking........ big waste of time....yawn bore

THIS IS THE WORST WRITING I HAVE EVER READ.. AUTHOR NEEDS SOME EDUCATION BEFORE TRYING TO WRITE AGAIN.. TOTAL BULLSHIT AND THATS BEING KIND

What a piece of lukewarm dog vomit.

Waste of time- I didn't even finish reading it.

Actually, it was quite hot! Loved it!

The writing is incomprehensible. Are you trying to waste space on the internet? You are better off not trying to a writer, one of porn even, and should apply for a janitorial position at McDonald's.

YES! I am of the making of this into. Extreemly exciting. Mort of this please! Too many ones with none of the hotness presented. I yell at my mother for disturbing the wanking. Thank you!

Greetings.

Please stop cluttering Literotica with your awful "stories." I use the term "stories" loosely to describe the dreck you type.

You are tricking horny people into reading experimental fiction. Nice.

For sure all those spasms had my cock twitching and oozing waiting for your mouth to lick it up. That's hot!