All Comments on 'Body of Water Ch. 06'

But then you knew I thought that. :) This was a really neat idea, different and original. You'll have to do something like it again. :)

I loved this story from the very first reading! While not my usual type of story, this was intriguing and enthralling. You are a fantastic writer who has an ability to create amazing written works. I really look forward to your next one.

So creative, really different from anything else I've read here. I loved how Nerina finally put the pieces together.

of this story...never read anything like it, but, lol...the hockey stories are still my favorite. Keep up the good work!

I didn't expect it to end so quickly, especially since the previous chapters moved so much more slowly... but I enjoy the closure. Thanks for writing.

i wasn't sure about the story the first two chapters, i'll admit that, there were so many things left in the unknown, but then things started to clear up and i got me hooked.

i'm just wondering why or how the brothers tricked them though.

I know this was different for you but you did great. loved it

Often the author is the last to know what they wrote. To me this is the story of the Garden of Eden and the problem between Cain and Abel and why it still affects us today. hersch

Not a typical romance, this! Frustrating at times, but your characters are just as real as in your more 'human' stories, and held me spellbound. I'm glad I took the time to read this, even if I won't be looking for any sequels! I have truly enjoyed everything you have shared with us on Lit, and have read most of you hockey stories more than once. On that note, I hope you are enjoying the playoffs!

i felt like i was drowning in the ebb and flow of the ocean...your story was like that - ebbing and flowing with a horrible feeling that there's no end...i was relieved when she finally remembered and the story ended - it felt like being able to breathe again...if that was your purpose, you definitely succeeded...not a story i want to read again but it was different for sure

Unique. A very compelling story. I really enjoyed it.

I like your other stories, and there was something about this one that drew me in and made me keep reading, but you definitely drew it out too much in this one. I love the idea, and a lot of the scenes, but going through the memory loss over and over is only good for so long, and after a while it goes beyond frustrating in the way that you want to keep reading to figure it out, and turns into frustrating in the way that you're seriously contemplating not finishing it. I'm glad I did, trust me, but it was just too much.

...And while the scene where it seems like Ajan is going to win is horrifying and very well written, the phrase "his brutal rock penis" just cracked me up.

I agree with the comments about the story being frustrating, and feeling that she would never regain all the memories, but I believe you did that on purpose so that we readers would really deeply FEEL the way that the frustration and waiting felt to the characters. That made the end blissfully satisfying. Unlike some other commenters, I WILL go back and read this again, so that I can understand it a bit more each time myself, just as Nerina did. Thank you for an intelligent, well-written, and very moving story!

I liked this one a lot. well written and creative. I do wonder what happens to her two best friends. Does she disappear, are the friends left hanging etc.

You amaze me. I have now read everything you have posted here on lit, and you do not disappoint. Please continue to write!! I work as the managing editor for a small publishing house, and I want to encourage you to seek out a formal publishing relationship, if you have not already. You are too good not to reach as many people as possible.

Cheers!

Great story! Thank you for sharing it!

MB, a terrifically re-imagineered recital of the mythos of the Titans, the chthonic pre-gods. Entities who existed before there was existence.

No wonder you made so many readers uncomfortable with this brilliant writing style. Congratulations, I am envious of your creativity.

Lauren Kate has written a supernatural romance series very similar to this. Although I might consider her's largely long winded I enjoyed this very much. It was a beautifully written story with plenty of feeling. Kate's Fallen series slapped me in the face when I read the comments, creative, the brothers etc. but now and all is a different take on a 2009 story.

Honestly, the angry elemental handled that whole situation wrong. Makes for a great story, but if he had been smarter and less jealous...he should have simply seduced them both. It was always the three of them...always. The beach they made love on was him. Each element is always found together. I am surprised you didn't give air a conscious form, but regardless...islands cannot be made without earth, fire, AND water. It was always the three of them. I cannot stand jealous jerks throwing a monkey wrench into a love story. He should have loved them both...He could have loved them both. Idiotic force of nature...He needs to grow up...lol

Great . Inddeed original and a classic love story.