All Comments on 'Bodyguards'

Nice story. But you forgot to actually *describe* your characters, especially Coilla. From the context, it seems that she isn't human, but I have NO idea HOW she actually differs from a human. Ravi appears to be larger than a human, with four arms and two cocks, but I still don't really know how I should imagine him. And I also don't know what Elizabeth looks like, though that isn't quite so important - I know what a pretty human girl could look like :-)

Thought this was an interesting story that developed the start of a possible sci-fi series with a nice alternate world just barely developed. Hope you consider developing these characters further and more fully. Nice start.

The longer ones make it harder to read online. Otherwise, an interesting start. I hope you continue.

Yeah... sorry about those big blocks of text O_o

My latest story has the same problem but hopefully I will remember in the future.

By the way, Coilla is a human female. The huntresses look like they are from India, crossed with the classic Amazonian warrior. Hope the image helps sort things out.

this is great