All Comments on 'Book Night'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
LOVED IT

i only wish my Master would read this and take heed that His slut would love to scene like this....mmmmmmmmm

HollyBlueHollyBlueover 16 years ago
A Rare Gem

<p>Seldom among BDSM short stories do I find one that takes an adequate snapshot of a 24/7 relationship at its best. It seems there is a hesitancy on the part of most authors to go full-out -- to allow themselves to write complete Dominance and submission as most of us <i>really</i> want it to be.</p>

<p>This vignette, on the other hand, does not hold back. Although it doesn't depict any extreme scening or activity, it still illustrates a profound extreme: that of the passionate joy experienced by a Dominant and submissive when things really click, when neither party is hindered by fears of what the other will think, and both parties are able to be their truest selves.</p>

<p>Although this piece will probably be virtually incomprehensible to anyone who doesn't understand Domination and submission, to those of us that do understand them, it could almost be used as a lesson in how things are <i>supposed</i> to be.

<p>In addition to being refreshing in its clear description of the feelings and behaviours of the happy couple, the story is also a somewhat rare glimpse into a Dominant's perspective. His internal battle for control over both partners' expressions of lust is well-described. The Dom in this story <i>knows how to be a Dom</i>, and therefore, his sub can be fully herself.</p>

<p>In terms of the writing, there were occasional uses of passive voice, as well as other stylistic choices, that held the work back from coming to life completely. I would recommend honing some of the sentences within the story to more precision and changing all instances of passive voice to active.</p>

However, the content is so outstanding (from my perspective as a submissive and an experienced reader of BDSM erotica) that despite a few writing imperfections, I just <i>had</i> to rate it a 5.

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