All Comments on 'Booty and the Feast'

Fantastic!

I love your writing. Please do not stop.

I must admit, this is the first of your stories I have read. I like your style! Very conversational. The story was great ... and hot. Just what I needed this morning. ~ L

Beautifully written, please continue with your writing.

Very romantic and hot!

Very readable and very enjoyable, it is an enchanting narrative.

Words fail me. You go from strength to strength. More power to your pen, AVL, I think we have discovered a star.

Hugs

The "other" AVL

While I enjoyed the spirit of the story and hope you'll keep writing, I would say that the little conversational asides to the audience and the trailing off mid sentence to interrupt yourself and get the story 'back on track' detract from the writing and distract the reader. A few of them sprinkled throughout can add familiarity and character to a story. This amount makes the writing disjointed and seem juvenile. For me, if I were telling a story to friends in person, the asides might make more sense as responses to their reactions, but in a non-live setting with no feedback, they seem artificial and contrived. The descriptions and plot pacing were lovely though and I'd like to hear more about the characters.

A warm and sweet story. Thanks

To the critic? if you want to be a critic have the courage to leave your name,this may not be the greatest story ever but for the genre of erotic fiction,its pretty good,and like most of AVL output left me wanting more,moreand another more

An interestingly-told little story.

A bit staccato at times, but well-sorted.

Thank you

HP

This is the best story of that I have read on this site yet.

Well thought out, well written and with just that human quality that I so crave.

Looking forward to more of your stories.

AngelusQC

I love all your stories, those voices in your head...love them...just priceless!!! Keep them coming..

Liked the ending - not a sad ending, not necessarily happily ever after, but hopeful.

Just had to re-read this, seemed better second time around.

To the critic, I couldn't disagree more, the pauses, asides and internal dialogues made it seem very real, and I had no problem with readability.

I'm new here at Literotica, was getting a little frustrated at some of the, well, to put it frankly, crap!

The I stumbled onto AVixenLiterally. What a breath of fresh air - believable characters, realistic situations and I LOVED the open-ended ending!

I'm looking forward to reading more of her work.

This is my first reading of AVL, never really liked stories that had the narration like this one. After getting past that, the story is great. When Jane was trying to imagine the things she would do to Mary, I have to admit I have done that so many times.

I will be reading other stories from AVL.

I'd love to hear how these two are doing!

I found this to be a sweet, sexy gem of a story. Glad I stumbled upon it! Unique style, great read.

Love your style. It's a little quirky but that's what makes it special. Another lovely story, short and sweet with high hopes for their future.