All Comments on 'Born to Love Ch. 03'

by Mistress_of_Passion

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Rancher46Rancher46over 1 year ago

Your story is progressing into a real loving relationship between sister and brother. 5/5

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Nice story, but...

Your style is rather simplistic. I hope with more writing experience you will "mature" and produce a little more than cardboard cutouts. Please, edit your work! Too many errors, "your" instead of "you're" and the ever problematic "I" and "me" usage. E.g. "He told Michael and me" Not "...Michael and I"! I am looking forward to more.

billyjim55billyjim55almost 12 years ago

I like reading happy and young love that seems so strong, thanks for having the ttime to get another chapter out this summer.

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