by bjmichaels
THERE MORE TO THIS LIKE DOSE SOMEONE SAVE HIM DOSE THE COP FALL IN LOVE OR WHAT
Firstly your character is disgusting - not even showering after having got cum on him and secondly this story made me just crazy about him being so stupid as well. Just couldn´t read it to the end - it´s not worth it!
If you can´t do better, leave the writing please.
If the bartender is shaking his head no-pay attention!
This is sick. Please tag your story with the word "rape" if you're going to write this shit.
this is rape, plain and simple. it's disgusting that many gays find rape so hot, nay fetishize and celebrate it. i guess russia is right to limit the effects of the gay propaganda on impressionable young minds
I mean, it's a pretty good story, and all. Tbch I love this sorta thing. The thing is, though, you have too many exclamation marks, and you capitalize in the wrong places.
Fix those, and I'll give you five stars
This is the best story I have read in my life. I look forward to the rest if not others of this kind