All Comments on 'Box Jewelry'

I voted a solid 4: 5 for a good story line and an interesting POV, 3 because I just can't help it - tense flipping and inconsistencies, plus typos, just drive me nuts. A bit more front-end editing would have made it much easier to read. Good story nonetheless. Now I need to check out your other writing. Cheers.

I thought it was well written with an interesting point of view.

Way to damn long with no action! Very long and dry lost all intrest half way through! This is the worst story i every tried to read on here! A single star is way to high a rating for this trash story!

Long winded build up to basically nothing

Was way too long. You maybe got word count confused with quality. I simply kept reading thinking things would improve until Jason came out and the chance that Kate would fuck him was lost. With that said, there was absolutely no point to include that segment into the plot line. As for dad and Kate, he never did actually fuck her so it was just a one off oral event. Truth or dare? Give me a break! The only way this story could have conceivably been salvaged is to have Laura get involved (passably a threesome).