All Comments on 'Breast Feeding Ch. 01'

Okay! I sighed

The writing was so grammatically poor that I couldn't even finish reading this.

I say tomorrow night she offers a blow job. I am guessing he cannot do that for himself. lol

It's interesting. The incest starts by the break-down of a breast pump. Funny!

I can't find any grammactical mistake. Maybe the comment of poor grammer came from a grammer teacher. Ha, ha!

Please please please if you're going to write in English, find a native English speaker to edit your story.

So how much you paid to read the story? When will you people get it ... sex and correct grammar can never occupy the same place. Words like Fuck are pronounced, Fuc well thats the way it sounds when fucking ... not everyone is a writer and to have someone do it for you is like asking another to experience fucking your partner ... the experience will not be the same and the writing although the grammar might be correct the story could be fiction or true ... it's not the other person experience ... and what are you doing grading papers?

Next chapter both love each other and both need to share their love

I understand the writer probably speaks English as a second language. This is by far a better story than I could possibly write in say Chinese. That being said the one comment about a native English speaker to edit the story would be a really good idea. Some great things going on in the story, but the dialogue comes off as if I am watching an old Kung Fu movie and I couldn't finish reading it. Kills the immersion in the story when you have to reread lines. Not trying to be too critical as the idea behind the story is solid and with a native English speaking editor could be a really nice read.

Oh please , write more.

Get an editor to fix your writing before you post!

I thought this was a good story, it got me hard. I have a strong fetish for incestious couples. I look forward to reading a continuation.

I understand that some of the comments are discouraging. But you have your own style and the story is very interesting.

Please get us the chapters that followed.

By the way, what's wrong with the kung fu movies. I think they are better.

Here husband is gone and his daughter is alone.

Maybe he can help.

It’s quite obvious that English is not your native tongue. This was so poorly written that I couldn’t make it past the first two sentences. Give up writing in English until you learn how to write properly in English.

Story possibly could be good, however, the grammer was so horrid I didn't make it past the first couple of paragraphs so I really don't know if it's good or not.

Great Start!

Thank You.

Great Start