All Comments on 'Brenda's Journey'

I absolutely loved it.

I started to read this and though 9 pages is way to long, I got to maybe page 5 and had to skip to the last page and yes it was way to long for me to read but I thought it was pretty good, next time can you please keep it short maybe under 5 pages please

You need to understand that not every author that submits work to Literotica is writing with you in mind. Different strokes for different folks.

Loved it the first time, loved it the second! Thanks for sharing your stories and look forward to more!

Erotic, well written! You make the characters come alive. You have talent. Do not stop writing. Very few are given the ability to transform the written word into a passionate story that catches the reader and will not let go. You are brilliant.

Nine pages is fine with me. I like long romantic stories. Sex scenes were delicious. 5 stars.

Nothing else to say!

If I could cote more, I would!

I remember reading this quite a while back and even though you corrected a lot of mistakes, it did not detract from the story. I still caught a few but the overall story was really well done.

The writing is awkward and doesn't flow well. This sentence, for example:

"If you're too uncomfortable, I can leave so that I don't cause you any embarrassment." Who says something like that and what does it even mean? Cause her embarrassment? What?

to offset the ass wipe on LIT that always gives a 1 after insulting the writer.

Almost everything here was first rate. I'd suggest you use a proofreader to catch the typos, but it's definitely a "5"!

I'm straight. But loved this. In my mind I'm bi and my husband loves this too.

I had read something lame and needed this. Sure, 9 pages is really much; with there was a lot more sex. Lots more and be descriptive and long winded. Strap on too. Oh, you carried me so well and I came like Amtrak going 90 into a VW stuck on the tracks. It was wonderful. I just would have loved more sex. More sucking, eating, kissing, and fucking. Please give me more descriptive fucking with that strap on.

I want to be you at times. Well, much of the time. With my husband sometimes watching or me telling him about it. Uh huh. Very good you are.

Please entertain me; us, again.

This is a great example of the importance of proof reading. The story flows. Before, I kept being stopped by the little writing errors.

lisa what a fantastically beautiful story of true romance and the love that they had and shared together well done.

Lisa, wonderful story. I enjoyed it the first time through. I look forward to more of you work. Thank you for sharing. To the nay sayers, get a life, get a pen and put your work out there for review otherwise try taking a long walk off a short pier! Lisa, keep writing!

DRock

There were places where I teared up and places that caused to laugh. I am a mostly straight guy while most of my friends are LGBT. I am almost 62 years old, so it hurt my heart as I read this and followed Brenda's Journey. I have seen this exact scenario played out time and time again. Sometimes relatives were open and accepting other times it was very ugly. So screw whatever writing errors there were, they are in the grand scope of life, insignificant. *To me* there was a message in the story far more important than any writing errors.

If only every woman could be that lucky. Wonderful job!

Well written story thanks.

Why only five stars? I would give a six!! This story has everything. A good story line, love, romance and ever growing eroticism. Now I'm late for work as I couldn't stop reading but first I need a shower! ;) Thank you Sexy_Lisa! Xx

THERE ARE NO WORDS TO REVEAL THE EMOTIONS I FELT WHILE READING THIS TUMULTUOUS STORY. WHAT MORE IS THERE. QUESTION WHY DID YOU WRITE A

( A BRENDA JOURNEY #2 )

I'm giving this journey a 🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹 dozen roses and 5🌟's

men are so different some woman can go from straight to gay, i guess thats apart of being emotional creatures. far as a straight man it aint happening

Way to often it is just about the sex, this however was more about character development, family and all the other things that life throws at you. 5 Stars, mind you if you ever put a Hill of Grace in an ice bucket again I may rescind that ;)

Read 'Until Tomorrow', then this one. The writing and storytelling has improved dramatically. Such a shame that you seem to have stopped writing. You have a gift!

This rewrite was definitely worth it, to us, at least. I hope it wasn't so hard on you.

This story does show off a much more polished skill ... and the story was quite good, if maybe a little too smooth sailing.

You've reached to point that I don't see how you could stop writing. And if you still are, please update your profile here to let us know how to follow you...

It's plaintiff, not plaintive. Longer than I was looking for.

A good story!

Thank you