All Comments on 'Brenda's Mature Feet Ch. 01'

But not great. Kinda feels rushed.

really hot, but next time David should be on his knees worshiping his mom's feet and toes too

Not bad but you csn tell it was written in a hurry.

This had one of the most erotic passages I've ever read. That one particular paragraph where Brenda teases the boy about worshipping her feet on the phone with the mother is unreal.

I really hope for a couple of sequels to come of from this

To be real, it was great plot-wise, but the dialogue from the narrator was lacking. Throughout the whole story, you can tell Brenda is really into it and really enjoys him worshipping her feet, but the narrator gives a lot of one word responses (like, "I'm sure." "would you like to suck on them?" and he responds with a simple yes.") I think if you make the narrator seem like he's more into it, the story will flow better. The plot is great and Brenda's lines are great, but his lines are lacking. Kinda sounds like it just happened rather than he got the opportunity to worship a woman's feet of whom he'd had a crush on.

Nice, not excessively long, well written and exciting. Well done.

This is a great perfect story. Thank you.