All Comments on 'Bridesmaid'

Well written, just needed a little editing. Can't wait for your next story!

5 stars and favorited! just fix the editing issues because they are distracting from an otherwise PERFECTLY DONE story

Please, I know it's easy for a writer to use, but the impersonal third person style is just so cold that even a good story suffers from coming across as a clinical description rather than a slice of life put into words on a page. I gave you five stars for your efforts anyway but it would have been so much better if it had been written as a story rather than just a description of what happened.