All Comments on 'Broken Birds Ch. 01'

This has the makings of a brilliant who-dun-it, (or who is he/she). I think the change of POV is handled well by changing from first to third person between David and the others. I'm looking forward to the next chapters. Thanks.

Little bit of grammar-nazism: watch your commas, sometimes you miss one when it is needed for clarity. Small point and didn't really spoil the tale. 5*

Eagerly awaiting rest of this mystery. Who is Elana? What is causing her fear or is it anxiety? Who killed the headless man? Why was he killed? Who is he?????Story raised many questions, no answers yet, just interesting probabilities. Please continue, want answers. Please.