All Comments on 'Broken Ch. 05'

I like the way you are developing the characters in this chapter. The way the two characters are interacting is making the story interesting.

Would like more of a physical description of him. More of what she is feeling by this strange instrument she isn't used to. Am enjoying the story but would love more mental pictures!

I wonder how long before he has her house trained?

Even if he has a P.O. Box, it would still list the city in which it's located and would be traceable to his name. That would give her an idea of where she is and help her plan her escape. She appears to be smart and very determined to escape, why didn't the boxes set off a red flag in her mind?

I love these stories so much. I hope you continue them soon I can't wait for more.

He seems childish, like when he pushed her out of bed with his feet, if he did it with his hand that'd be different but the feet seem like a 5 year old having a temper tantrum.